Haiku/Senryu / Exquisite Torture (Analysis)

Boy, that brought back some sneaky memories!  I remember that cushion as a high-tech toy.  It was for its day.  LOL.  (Well, not too loud—the teacher might get us!)  LOL again.

Haha good job! At first I thought it was going to be like a monster or something at the end. You took me completely off gaurd. I can see why its one of your favorites.

nice one :)

Haha, excellent. My only critique is you replace ‘leap’ with something else and maybe change the second line to “he squeezes, without mercy,” Really good work here.

Fabulous- what more can I say?

Fun, I have never seen a whoopie cushion mentioned, well, anywhere actually.

Thanks for the laugh!

Interesting senryu, I have not seen any quite like it. The last line certainly catches one by surprise, while on a whole the senryu paints a clear picture.

A modern haiku.  Well written.  Funny and of life.

Cute, I like it. Made me laugh—the ending was a surprise, especially considering the title. Well done.