Poetry / Husband (Analysis)

Overall I like the general attitude and motivation behind this piece. It’s well thought out and written in a mature fashion. One thing I would definitely recommend is to finish with a word other than “germinate” at the end of the third stanza. It has an odd connotation given the context and I really don’t believe it serves the poem well on the whole, distracting from the point. Other than that, good job.

i love your structure and flow
it was a bit mysterious and i had to read it twice but i really didnt mind

Not sure about the use of “worship” in the first line if it is pointed towards flesh and blood.
I get the feeling that you are putting your husband on a pedestal as if he is some kind of (god).

Hummmm, actually, this seems to be a prayer or praise one would give to God.

Very nicely spoken.A romantically expressed thank you.Any wife can relate to your poem and most likely have felt the same.I enjoyed this piece and have no real critique for you.Just watch the unnecessary capatilizations.

I think it doesn’t go underneath the surface of what you truly feel the style was smplistic but I think it’s good that this could be read during an anniversary dinner or during a wedding ceremony.

Interesting piece and concept.  It was very well written but I got confused at first because I think you trying to get the meaning that with the Husband, a new world is made…but when I read it, it almost sounded like you were talking of a family member.  I don’t know, the understanding of the poem was just confusing.

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April 09, 2008

by StoneAngel

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I’ve shared this in another forum, where I deliberately chose to include it in “Reflections” rather than “Love”.  It is more about my developement in relation to the masuline, rather than any particular person, thus your confusion.  Being poetry, you are welcome to form your own interpretations! :)

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This is really good. I enjoyed in immensely, as it reminds me of what love and marriage can truly be.

As far its ability to be reviewed, it is my opinion that poetry such as this is accessible and well structured enough to warrant the time needed. As for overall, this poetry is excellent and should be published, as it leaves me wanting more.

Thank you for letting me read.