Non-fiction / View From One Seat Behind

The view from one seat behind provided a glimpse of a persons future travels. However it is never eluded to if in fact he is traveling with someone. It is mentioned about the need to travel with others however the man behind maybe alone traveling for biz.   I think this piece could be expanded just a little more. All and all thought I enjoyed it and it was a very telling tale.

Maybe it was because I realized that I myself was only one seat behind…

profound.

I found myself getting pulled emotionally and I think that is important to include that element when you are writing about the issue of aging and loneliness. I also liked how you were very descriptive.

I liked it.

I really enjoyed this piece a great deal for a number of reasons, not the least of which it was very heartfelt and touching.

I have not travelled alone often, but I appreciate the realities of travelling to unknown places alone.  The uncertainty is captured here.  Sometimes we just need someone to tell us “everything will be just fine….we’ll get there”.

My only suggestion would be to expand on this.  I know it is non-fiction, but I think it could be the basis of a reflective short story.

Thanks for sharing.

This is a great piece. It’s all very true. I can’t really find any mistakes. Maybe a few tiny errors, but nothing serious.

Well done.  It made me think of my grandfather.  I rarely feel many emotions while reading submissions, but this was well done and had a great ending.

I’m not totally sure, but I think you could replace the commas in the sentence below with semi-colons.?

at, how far down the concourse to the gate of his next flight, an

Thanks for the feeling!

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February 02, 2007

by blkjagdrvr

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Thank you all for your great reviews. I am glad you were all able to feel what I did.

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Nice observation.  I thought the writing flowed very well and you had some nice visuals.  I liked the image of the man’s hands that were creased as paper.

I’ve not actually got any criticisms I liked the way it read.  I would have liked it to have been longer but at the same time it was pretty complete.  Maybe this could be part of something larger?

You raise a good point about travel companions- many of us would much rather tolerate companions about whom we’re less than passionate than “go it alone.”

I really felt for the old man on the plane. One wonders what else he relied on his wife for.

The ending was perfect! Do I detect a metaphor?

Fantastic; it was as if I knew what would have followed, but the last paragraph simply cuts that out – rather as if it jolted me out from imagining more things about ‘I’. The old man was truely life-like, although on one point, it did seem too ‘cliche’ if I may put it that way. It was a good example, nonetheless, almost heart-wrenchingly so.

Thank you for sharing.