Poetry / Words End

While this is not uncontrolled, I don’t feel you’ve pushed this very far. It falls in the category of inarguable truths. If you’d said ‘the sky is up,’ it would be something we could all agree on—but is that enough? Telling us that words pigeonhole ideas (I think that’s what you meant to say) is like summarizing a poem we haven’t read. You should not be telling us this; you should be making it happen in front of our eyes.

Interesting. I like it because it is short, sweet, to the point.

I especially like the imagery of the last two lines.

Good use of lack of punctuation and alliteration. =)

Second line is a little too close to cliche for me, not really adding much to the poem.

very well put together…the strong, precise wording adds to the overall imagery of the work. all in all, a very, very interesting piece.

Moves well , makes the reader think, it is a very good overall with just one suggestion. The last line, maybe find another word so ideals is not repeated.

Not trying to attack. How would you write without words? I’m not quite sure what you’re trying to tell “us” the reader. I don’t like ending the last two lines with the word “ideals”

This poem is short and to the point.  Sometimes words, as many of them that exist, are insufficient to express thoughts or feelings. Without yarny, flowery examples of how words are really just too insufficient or ambiguous, it is written plain and simple, which means it is accessible by anyone of any level of education or wit. My only main problem with the poem are the last two lines.  It’s redundant.  Perhaps one of the ‘ideals’ was supposed to be ‘ideas’ – which would make more sense and flow better.

I didnt like this piece…

It is defeatest and insular , everything that poetry isnt.
Poetry is about using  even manipulating words and language to break down the barriers of ideal and ideas.

Even when dealing with the gloomiest of topics good poetry will challange thought and imagination and surpass mere words

This is more a margin note to writers block then a piece of poetry

I am a bit confused on the purpose of the piece. The concept of writing without words seems very interesting. However, elaborating on that subject wouldn’t be too bad.

I like this a lot. My interpretation of it is…you want to be able to say how you feel, & you feel limited at times, you can’t find the right words. I can relate to that on many levels, I’m good and writing what I feel, but can never say it. Great job I love your work.