Poetry / Here We Go Again (Analysis)

I appreciate the real-life material and the genuine emotions behind this, but I’m afraid it just didn’t work for me. I found the rhyme trite, the rhythm worked in places but was awkward in others, and the inconsistent capitalisation and punctuation was offputting. Perhaps try focusing less on rhyme and more on what you want to say and how the words flow.

The musicality and the rhyme is really enjoyable.  There is a beginning, middle and end which makes it narrative type of poem.  

First I would just like to say that I like the basic theme behind this poem and the overall story to it. Other than that you seem to try too hard to rhyme. Remember poetry is no about rhyme it’s about rhythm and metaphor. If you must rhyme then choose your words carefully. I think after some wordplay this poem really could be a winner and I would love to read the finished product.

A very humerous poem about life as a parent. I can relate to this since I had four of my own, and grateful they do not have any of their own yet! I think I will make this a favorite of mine, it had me smiling and laughing all the way through!

i felt nothing reading it
do you have better ones(not to be mean)?