Poetry / The Personification Of Inspiration (Analysis)

I really liked this. Though it’s a bit different from the normal poetic structure, you clearly display that you know how to organize your own thoughts in order to present them in a poetic fashion. Nice!

A lovely piece. The alliteration and meter are refreshing and sharp. They really convey to the reader a sort of occasional partnership between you and your muse that while strong, is also fleeting. A great poem describing the creative process!

Love this continual reference to wisdom and or inspiration  on a sensual level. Also enjoyed the illiteration in the start and hungered to see it again but alas. good over all.

wow.. you have serious skill with words.. rhyming as many as four words together.. while most people would sacrifice quality and power of words with heavy rhyme.. you only make the words more powerful..

my favorite line would have to be “to tantalize me with precious preachings of pronounced prose”.

you’ve inspired me to write something similar..

im slightly confused with the ending.. however as i read it over i realize it talks about how your love and muse may have left.. but another may come soon and she still inspires..

great work. =)

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August 16, 2008

by Blacktigre

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Thanks.. Im glad you drew inspiration from my piece. Thats what its all about for me :)

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Vivid, carnal, portions felt dirty, making me feel almost voyeuristic, like I was interrupting something private, but I liked it.  ”Our destination determined by dictated decibels as damaging as a thrown boulder..”  Lines like that just thrust out at you and you can almost hear and shudder at the collision taking place.  Inspiration is a form of lust.  I think as a writer you are meant to be constantly seduced, and by giving it a personification, the reader has to envision some sultry vixen sauntering by, a beauteous Muse from Greek myth whispering in your ear what to right, guiding your pen, your fingers, and tapping into a part of you that is all at once forbidden and unleashed.  Simply, brilliant.

unique!  love your individual style and would love to see more of your work,

I enjoyed the pervasive use of alliteration.  I felt that the “fold over/thrown boulder” rhyme was a bit forced, especially considering that it’s the only place that you mention her words as being “damaging.”  Through most of the rest of the poem you mention her “supple syllables” and “pronounced prose,” so saying that her words were damaging seemed inconsistant.

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April 27, 2008

by Blacktigre

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In hip hop/spoken word subculture words that have negative meanings are often used to describe things positively. In this case I wanted to show the magnitude of “her” words.  

April 28, 2008

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Fair enough.  I still feel that the word “damaging” could be replaced by something more specific… “smashing” maybe.

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Giving this a title does help to solidify your point. Can definitely relate to a person being an inspiration to someone.

I really like your imagery here in the personification of inspiration. There are a couple of minor spelling and grammatical fixes you could make (for example the capitalisation of ‘I’) just to improve the readability of the passage. Overall, good work!