Dark Haiku Colection (Analysis)

FEED, FEEL, FALTER, FALL.
DESTROY, REBUILD, FEEL SO SMALL.
VAINLY TRY TO CRAWL.

RUST IS ALWAYS THERE.
CLINGING TO MY INSIDES NOW.
WASH IT ALL AWAY.

SUBMIT TO MY WHIM.
PLEASE HELP ME FEEL BETTER NOW.
I AM INSECURE.

COMPLETE CHAOS REIGNS.
SURVEY THE DAMAGE WITH ME.
DOUBLE EDGED SWORD-OUCH.

NO MORE CRAZY DAYS.
ONLY NIGHTS AND THAT IS GOOD.
DRUGS AND DRINKING HELP.

THE KING IS DEAD NOW.
NO ONE CAME TO HELP HIM.
HE IS BETTER OFF.

LIMBO SUICIDE.
NOT MY IDEA OF FUN.
I NEED A DRINK NOW.

ALMOST OUT OF SPACE.
RUNNING OUT OF TIME ALSO.
TOMORROW PLEASE COME.

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July 20, 2008

JamesPatrick

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June 10, 2008

Earl_Daniels

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May 31, 2008

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April 22, 2008

imara219

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imara219 reviewed Version 1 - Read 100%% of the Item

I think the last was my favorite. 6 & 7 were off to me, they just didn’t quite fit the rest of the piece as well as the others. I think you def pulled me in and I wanted to see where you were going with this. The imagery is there and the flow was good, for the most part.