Poetry / And She Was...

A penny for your thoughts, Princess

Sweet angel

Goddess of smut

Flame tosser

Lovely entertainer of mine

I can offer you two at reason

Three is lucky

But four is just impractical

Speak if you must

But mostly just stir

Stir baby

You know how I like it

You are overdramatic at best

But remember that

Nobody likes a stool pidgeon.

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May 05, 2008

youngjed

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39	M	United Kingdom	November 23

youngjed reviewed Version 1 - Read 100% of the Item

I liked this a lot.  It had a canny attitude. I particularly liked flame tosser and lovely entertainer of mine.  i think the last two lines maybe deflate this a bit, why might she be a stool pigeon?  

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May 06, 2008

by zombie_penny

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20	F	Greeley, CO	December 01

because this poem is about a young girl caught in an abusive situation with a man that is using and exploiting her

May 06, 2008

by youngjed

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39	M	United Kingdom	November 23

wow, can i suggest you develop the end a bit to make that more obvious??  really would make the whole piece muchmorepowerful….

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April 27, 2008

asphyxiatedsmile

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asphyxiatedsmile reviewed Version 1 - Read 100% of the Item

Hm… I like the imagery, but I think you need to fill it out just a bit :)

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