Short Story / My Story - Continuation/conclusion (Analysis)
“Free the kids; I’m going after the bomb,” the lady officer said.
Two officers ran toward the boys and worked to free them. One of the officers picked at and peeled the tape away from the boys’ mouths.
“Agh!” Jesse groaned. “We’re glad to see you.”
“Are you boys okay?” The officer asked.
“We’ll be better when we get out of here,” Mark said.
“You got that right Mark,” Jesse said.
After the second officer freed Mark, he rushed over to Dan and quickly cut at the rope that tied Dan to the chair.
After the lady officer dismantled the bomb, she walked over to Dan, picked at the tape, and pulled it from Dan’s mouth.
“Assich!” Dan cried.
“I’m sorry sweetheart.”
As soon as Dan was free, the officers brought them outside.
“What happened and who did this to you?” The lady officer asked.
“We were following these guys who we thought had smuggled stolen paintings from the Louvre to here,” Dan replied.
“The robbery from the Louvre?” The officer asked.
“Yeah, that’s the one. The men caught us, tied us up, and gagged us,” Jesse said.
“They sure tied us up tight too. My wrists are sore,” Dan said as he rubbed his wrists. “That was worse than being gagged.”
“I heard that,” Jesse replied.
“You boys should’ve told us about what was happening. We would have checked it out. It’s our job to take risks.”
“We’re trying to prove ourselves as legit detectives, ma’am. We’re a part of the Tomorrow’s Promise program; Mr. Jake Hansen’s teaching us,” Jesse replied as he shown the officer his ID card.
“You boys were brave, I give you that,” the officer replied as she took down their statements.
“Hey guys, are you okay?” Nick asked as he rushed to meet his friends after the officer had finished
“We’re fine,” Jesse said.
“I would’ve been in to help you guys, but…”
“It’s alright, Nick,” Mark said.
“The men have been arrested. The paintings have been found,” Nick informed them.
“There’s some good news,” Jesse thought and looked toward the dock.
“Nick.”
Nick turned to see his uncle.
“Are you okay Nick?”
“I’m fine, Uncle Jake,” Nick replied.
“Dan?” Uncle Nate called out. “Are you okay?”
“I’m fine,” Dan replied.
The man hugged and kissed Dan’s head.
“I must congratulate you boys on a super job. We have been trying to get these men for a while. When we heard about this case from Detective Hansen, we had to act,” Sergeant O’Reilly said.
“Thanks sir,” Nick said.
Dan saw the men in the units and smiled.
“Let’s go back to the store and celebrate. Ice creams for everyone,” Nate said.
The group left the dock and headed toward the store. The boys talked on the way. Nate and Jake smiled. Nate opened the store, turned on the lights, and opened the display case.
“Let me help,” Dan said.
“No. You sit with your friends; you guys deserve it,” Nate said.
“Let me help then,” Jake said.
The men scooped cones to the boys and for themselves.
“Hello, I’m Jake Hansen; I’m Nick’s uncle.”
“Nate Jenkins, Dan’s uncle,” Nate replied and shook Jake’s hand. “Your nephew is quite exceptional.”
“I’m very proud of him. He has been through a lot. His parents died a year ago in a car crash. I took Nick in and raised him. We have had our fair share of shakeups but he has come around. Dan seems like a good kid,” Jake said.
“Yes he is, and very talented.”
The next day, the boys were in the store. Dan put in the news disc; the front page read:
TEEN SLEUTHS CRACK CASE
Today was definitely a victory for three teenage boys who busted a major art theft case. The boys were excited for their victory today. They told us that it almost didn’t happen.
“I was a little scared,” Jesse said. “I thought we’d…”
“Hey guys, check this out,” Dan said as he shown everyone the front-page article.
“Hey, I look good,” Mark said and nodded.
“You’re a cutie,” a familiar voice called from behind Mark.
The boys turned to see Rene and Gina, the girls from the mall. Gina approached Mark and kissed him on the cheek.
“I just love a good detective,” Gina said.
Nate and Jake chuckled when they saw Mark’s face.
“Will you sign my copy?” Gina asked.
“Sh-sure,” Mark said as he smiled.
“It’s spelled, M…a…r…k,” Jesse said.
Everyone laughed.
“This was a great day for us,” Jesse said.
“Yeah it was,” Nick said and saw Dan’s head bent low.
“What’s wrong Dan?”
“I wish I could be a part of your group,” Dan said.
“You are man,” Nick said. “You helped us crack this case.”
“Does that mean I can be a detective?” Dan asked.
“You’d have to take classes, but I don’t see anything wrong with it, do you Uncle Jake?” Nick asked.
“Welcome Dan,” Jake said as he shook Dan’s hand.
“Thanks sir,” Dan said.
“You’re welcome son,” Jake said as he gave Dan his card.
Jake grinned as he watched the boys give high-fives with their faces glowing. He remembered when he had seen the same glow in Nick’s face when he and Nick connected and became a real family a few years ago. He loved Nick more than words could say and he would support his son in whatever he chose to do. Jake took out a certificate of adoption and smiled at it. He was saving it for a special occasion; today was just the day.
“Uncle Jake?” Nick asked as he approached the man, “what’s up?”
“Just call me dad,” Jake said.
“What do you mean?” Nick asked.
“Read it,” Jake said and gave Nick the certificate.
Nick read the certificate and asked, “You’ve adopted me as your son?”
“I love you son,” Jake said as he hugged the boy.
“I love you too Dad,” Nick said.
“I received the certificate this morning. I was waiting for the right moment to share it with you,” Jake said. “You’ve been with me since you were nine. We’ve had our shakeups, but you’ve come around.”
“If it hadn’t been for the program, who knew what would happen,” Nick said.
“I believe you would’ve found your purpose with or without it. You’re a special kid and not just because you’re smart enough to make a nuclear powered toaster,” Nate chuckled, “you’re multi gifted and have a strength that I wish I had at your age.”
Jake picked up a cup of soda he had poured, raised it, and said, “To my son, Nick, the greatest kid I know.”
“To my Dad, the best I know,” Nick said as he touched each cup and drank.
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You have something interesting here, maybe a few too many elements working together at once, but you definitely have an interesting beginning to something much larger. Keep going. Just be aware of the Hardy boys feeling you get from reading this.
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