Children's / Billy Goat gets Lost
Billy Goat was a playful fellow
he loved to play outside
one day when Nanny Goat looked away
billy went to hide
he ran into the woods that day
and soon could not be found
he ran deep into the brush
as far as he could go,
then he stopped to look back
when he couldnt run no mo—
he saw no one had followed him
and billy goat just smiled-
they’ll never find me now he said
i lost em by a mile
then billy looked around and saw
some tall grass growing near
so billy started eating
and when he eats he has no peer
he ate and ate and ate some more
until he got his fill
and then he fell fast asleep
from his enormous meal
he slept for, oh, an hour or two
then woke up in the dark
and thats when Billy figured out
he was lost there in the park.
he called out to his Nanny Goat
and then to his friend Tom Cat
then Billy realized that no one was
there to lead him back
he tried to go back the way he came
but which way was that?
it was getting dark and cold
and Billy Goat was lost and fat
he searched the woods for trails
that might lead him safely home
but whatever way that Billy went
he still wound up alone
he sniffed the air for scents
that might show him the way
but never found a scent he knew
he’d not get home today
he heard coyotes howling
somewhere down below
so he turned and ran the other way
as fast as he could go
then he saw 2 bright and glowing lights
in the woods ahead
and he heard the farmer’s voice and cried,
“hooray, it’s time for bed”
the farmer took Billy home to Nanny Goat that night
and Billy went straight to bed
he’d had an awful fright
the moral of this story is
dont run too far away,
cause coyotes hunt in packs my friend
each and every day.
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Just go over the basics—grammar and punctuation.
Other than that, I think it’s great and lots of kids would love it.
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You should vamp this into a really short story. As a poem it dindt really flow well to me. I liked the story and the lesson that a billy goats should learn. Just the form of it took away from the story.
I liked this. It flows very well and the rhyme is good. I also liked the fact that it teaches a lesson. good Job.
Several nitpicking points to consider as your target audience is children. You switch between vernacular and elevated almost archaic language, this would make the reading diffcult for most children who are young enough to appreciate the story being told. Also grammar is need to make the piece readable as anything other than a very long run on sentence. The moral is amusing, but it may be above the head of most children.
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