Humor/Satire / Physics.

Well, I can see the humor in you knowing the answer and then, unfortunately for you, keeping your mouth shut. This is not really laugh out loud funny though.
As for improvements I might suggest not reinventing writing and standard English usage. The code you developed for getting rid of half of all the words read in the article by using different typefaces, brackets, and quotes, is inaccurate in describing clearly what occurred, and makes the article virtually unreadable and almost totally unenjoyable.
Try using things like “The teacher asked “When there are….” and then next “I thought to myself “I don’t know”.” Instead of just writing the word “silence” in bold typeface, and then using your confusing “explanations” notes, use “The class sat in silence.” Just use normal English to identify the speaker, the thinker, and the action.
I think that this could be improved with a rewrite.

yesh, amen.

I can see some humor here, and I think that many people will be able to relate to this piece.

However, even with the explanation you provide in Notes for Reviewer, it is still difficult to decipher. You might try rewriting it using some line breaks or italics to clarify what is going on. It’s also difficult to read with all of the slashes and brackets.

I don’t get it…

Ahh wait I think I do get it! Is it supposed to be like the teacher defined the defintion? Yea, I do get it! And I like it :) Good story

It’s still bit confusing with the use of quotation marks.  Try using the single quotes ’’or the one next to 1 and the !, ``.  I got the feeling three people were talking.  I’ve totally had those days.  It’s a funny piece, very sarcastic, just my cup of tea.

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May 09, 2008

by SophieCostello

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The people are talking/acting. I’m in the [], thinking something that’s actually the answer, but of course since I’m always wrong in physics, I don’t say anything at all. The girl next to me did though, she said the thing I thought about saying, and it was of course correct. Bummer! As for the sarcasm? Sarcasm is lovely <3 the main humour of Dk, I suppose (and so I am told) haha.

May 09, 2008

by SophieCostello

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Oops. Three*, not the ;>

May 09, 2008

by Fenvy

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That makes sense.  Thanks for explaining.

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I understand the humor here, I wish you would have built it up a little more. But I know what happened to you. You get called on, and you get what feels like a ridiculous question, and you blurt out a thought of sarcasm. And your right. good job, I felt the pain

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May 09, 2008

by SophieCostello

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Haha. I didn’t blurt it out. I had the correct answer, but the girl sitting next to me answered before me, which was kind of annoying seeing as I’ve said like five things that were correct in an entire year of Physics. Darn! Haha.

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i don’t know if it’s humour either…  but, i liked it!

I too hate physics.  well done

It wasn’t really that funny.  It was extremely “been there, felt that”, but not so funny.  If everyone posted a funny or ironic conversation they had, this site would be overflowing.

What you described is very common. The same situation has gone through my head more than a few times. Not funny in a ha-ha sort of way, but the irony was appreciated… :)