Poetry / Memories of A Self (Analysis)

This is a very excellant piece. I can feel every bit of your pain and there are many people that have felt this before. You will speak to their soul as you did mine I’m sure.
One suggestion,
“I claw at my rotting flesh, to only find nothing inside” might sound better like:
“I claw at my rotting flesh only to find nothing inside”
Good work.

I know the feeling. I like it ~

Paul

Reads as more of an essay than a poem, to me. There are a few phrases that I’d rework to avoid cliche, such as “rotting flesh” and “lingering memory”. The theme is a common one, (despair, being trapped, falling) so I’d try to find something striking to create a good image. Your flesh isn’t really rotting… what is it? “I claw at my…”

very detailed , in my opinion a bit too detailed
Chained by the pain – i likes this smiliarity , very striking

Im not too sure on how to review poetry but since you asked!

This reads like the mind of a despressive, you use words to signify opression and the feeling of pain well.  Im not sure ‘rotting flesh’ fits though, it seems out of tune with the rest of the poem. I like the last line, ’ I will never be who I eas, yet I do not want to be who I am’  it is very reflective and brings the poem to a nice close.

brilliant use of words.  I like the way you have ended this a statement of fact.  Keep it up!