Poetry / Apologies
Apologies
You wrote to apologize,
or so it says on this note.
Lengthy words,
carelessly strung together on a piece of paper – the back of a register receipt –
reaching out to me like hands…
trying to touch me,
feeling for me,
stretching longer and longer – yet never reaching my heart.
Because they lack in sincerity?
Or is it because it’s too late
for one more round of the self-serving explanations you offer in place of real humility.
It almost makes me laugh –
your desperate attempts at justification,
your self-righteous finger pointing..
all wrapped up in sweet, innocent words of ‘apology’ -
uttered so many times they have lost their meaning.
And that almost makes me cry.
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the back of a register receipt…describe the complete “nothingness” of the paper, your feeling that its not worth the paper it’s written on; like thermal paper in which the type disappears after time, the crumbled paper which was once trash…
reaching out to me like hands…excellent and intelligent.
stretching longer and longer…change longer and longer. Describe the effort or non-effort here.
Because they lack in sincerity? Good, a question. That evokes thought from the reader. A sense of what is or is not important in an apology.
Or is it because it’s too late (?) somewhere as you’ve asked another question.
...self-serving explanations you offer in place of real humility…excellent once more.
uttered so many times they have lost their meaning…or never had a meaning?
Simple revision will create a masterful piece here. A few descriptive words to help create the feelings here would be helpful. It is an emotional piece you are trying to create but lacks the power of emotion.
Thank you for the oppertunity.
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