Poetry / Ode to the Indian Summer (Analysis)

I certainly not not describe this piece as overzealous, but I think that I know how you came to that conclusion.  I feel that it is good to release your emotions is such a way, especially as an homage.
  I actually like the first line quite alot.  Overall, I like the imagery invoked.  For some reason, and it hit me very early in the reading, I noticed that there is no punctuation throughout the work, which for me, took something away from it; the dramatic pauses, et cetera.  I like this type of poetry, it actually invokes an image of someone passionately pouring out his soul to another.  Very nicely done.  I would read it over and perhaps think about some changes to the vocabulary.  Well-done!

I think it has texture in the same way Frank Ohara would write.

Interesting. Spiritual and rewarding. Thank you ~

Paul

Wow. Spectacular. The rhythm and the beat are perfect, like skipping along to the story. Thank you. I love her description – we love and fear, admire and dislike. But then your perfect ending – Yet I lay, all the while, enraptured in your clutch
As your soft shroud unravels in a cold afternoon.