Thanks for your reviews. You’re right about this ” blog ” or whatever you wish to call it. However, on the poem, “The Bare Essentials”, I wasn’t sure what it was all about at first. I now must say it is both a spiritual and love poem. I didn’t realize it was so much a correlation. So, I really do appreciate your review.
Journalism / Soul Bomb (Analysis)
Some how, I go on. Feeling my way through this haze bomb smoke created by the explosion of my soul. Cautiously aware of only myself, I stumble into people with the kind presence that seems to emanate an air of serenity and compassion. Just around every corner I turn, there lies a manifestation of prior lessons learned, revealing even more truth about the man I currently am. Those corners are essentially the forks in the road of my recovery. Choices never cease to present themselves, therefore, decisions are always to be made and in turn, action is always to be taken. If pain is weakness leaving the body, then strength must be from the power that releases pain. This must be the source of my idiopathic strength that I have unknowingly tried to create for myself for so long now. Can I use “idiopathic” like that? Maybe it’s too much. Maybe not for those who appreciate the use of words like that, or at least those who appreciate the effort. Hell, they might just laugh.
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aardjordan reviewed Version 1 -
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kan8 reviewed Version 1 -
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well its not very detailed
the scenes created are pretty good with a bit of imagination
and i laughed
you should really just broaden this one piece out
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krts reviewed Version 1 -
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I like this a lot! I don’t like it that you question your own prose towards the end. I was with you all the way until those last 4 sentences. Still, a very good piece.
neophytepoetess reviewed Version 1 -
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While I am curious about the story, this is not considered journalism. I am a broadcaster with experience in news writing, reporting and anchoring. This has more of a poem feel to it. In journalism, you are reporting an experience or story, not telling me how you felt throughout. It looks like you might want to change the category for this.
streamwalker2001 reviewed Version 1 -
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“haze bomb smoke created by the explosion of my soul” – nice
“If pain is weakness leaving the body, then strength must be from the power that releases pain.” – a thoughtful line….
not sure about the little turn in direction after “idiopathic”, but on the whole this piece works for me… a journey inward…
well written and thoughtful… i liked it… keep writing!
Ramblin_Jack reviewed Version 1 -
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I’m not sure if this fits in with my own idea of journalism, due to the narrative flow i would describe it as more poetry or a spoken word piece or as you say yourself part of a blog. I liked it, the imagery is quite strong, especially the part about the haze of bomb smoke also the image of prior lessons already known around every corner.
tinfish reviewed Version 1 -
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This passage is a good kind of passage to work out some things – wrapping language around deep inner workings of oneself. There are some sound philosophical thoughts there, and some humor. I hope these good qualities of your writing will flourish.
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