Poetry / After Reality

Sorrow and happiness share me

I see that both have their moments

The force that parts them hold it’s anonymity

The reason for this momentary confusion makes no sense

My thoughts have no value here

Only the fact that here I exist

The love I so long to cherish is near

The life in front of me is a mist

I can feel the light as it draws near

Letting go of my desires bring fear

Letting go results in falling deeper in the flow of life

Here I stand, staring into the fog covered ocean

This harmonious ocean of love awaits my eternal dive

Hesitating I tremble in the comfort of my own skin

The ground beneath me is giving way

Contemplating, my knees are growing weak

I can’t avoid the truth much longer

I look around for something to hold

My insecure delusions are growing stronger

Old safe havens are no longer warm, rapidly growing cold

Then I discover that my thoughts are behind reality

I’ve only realized what has already been done

I’ve made the launch and it’s all left up to gravity

The dive

It’s eternal.

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May 01, 2008

Butterflyaway

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Butterflyaway reviewed Version 1 - Read 100% of the Item

I understand the poem and the fact that it was about recovery (I was able to put myself in your writing and know it), but from a poetry aspect I couldn’t make it work for me.  You started by not rhyming then you started to rhyme then you stopped, either do or dont…it made it really hard to follow.  

good luck
butterflyaway

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May 01, 2008

HeavyMetalMouth

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HeavyMetalMouth reviewed Version 1 - Read 100% of the Item

A lot of cliche with no direction. The mood is nice but the content lacking. Thanks ~

Paul

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May 01, 2008

by Blinded

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The direction was unknown at the time. The lack of content, note, the title.  Thanks man.

May 11, 2008

by HeavyMetalMouth

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Title: noted. And as for direction, I guess I can relate to that… after all, it comes together well really.

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May 01, 2008

xPoeticDistract

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xPoeticDistract reviewed Version 1 - Read 100% of the Item

You’re writing is amazing.
You’re words, flawless.
I can’t add onto it, i’m assuming the dive is for love, or something of that nature, but that’s only my thought of it.
Great Job, mate.

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