Poetry / Faceless

Good Lyrics, You gave them good prompts. It’s not something I would buy.

I agree, poetry doesn’t to be so deep.
You perfectly compared the “porn” industry with poetry.

‘When the light is perfect
The whores all look so beautiful’

Ah—don’t ask me why, but I’m thinking of Macbeth.
Maybe because of the whores hiding in the darkness what they really are.
‘Fair is foul and foul is fair.’
Nothing is what it seems.
Nice work.

I enjoyed this piece, but thought some parts were more potent than others. “Their blood red petals, fragile, perched/ Upon such spare and delicate frames” are easily the best lines of the poem because they give such a vivid image; I wish there were more descriptive lines like this in the poem.  A good read, with the potential to be a great read.

This presents a clear picture.  I liked it.  You might describe more about “when the light is perfect” which I thought was a good opening line.  Is it midnight out on the street, or early morning sunrise?  Or is it a movie scene?  Is the light dim or bright?
I think you could expand on this a bit.

I think we have only just begun to scratch the surface of what unlimited access to pornography is doing to our society, especially those who are growing up knowing nothing else.  Glad you wrote this.  From a critical standpoint it is still a bit rough around the edges but I’ll let the others go for the bread crumbs.  This is probably one of the few times I will suggest you expand the piece.  So much can be said on this subject.  Thanks

Somehow your imagery made pornography seem almost tasteful.  I loved the first four lines.  I wasn’t really satisfied with the ending though and found myself wishing the last four lines were as captivating as the first. I gave you all 8’s and 9’s for your criteria.  Good luck!