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Lyrics / The Force that Through the Green Fuse Drives the Flower (Analysis)
She loved her days in school
She loved the daily rhyme of measured time
And all the pointless rules
The weekend peeled away just like an orange rind
And left those juicy jewels
Of her days in school.
She took a job.
It was the thing to do when you were 22
To keep your spirits up
She had the folks to please and such a jones to prove
She hadn’t screwed it up.
She had no time to stop
To think she might have turned her back
On the force that through the green fuse drives the flower
That saucy power
That swims beyond the border of the well worn track.
But life was full.
There was a place to stay every hour of the day
To help her keep her cool
Plenty of screens around to keep the creeps at bay
And give her work to do
Keep her from feeling blue
She felt it nonetheless.
It crept up on her quiet and kissed her smooth and sly
While she got herself dressed
Made her want to lie down and make her close her eyes
Until the feeling passed
But it was here to last
To think she might have closed her eyes
On the force that through the green fuse drives the flower
That saucy power
That slips in through the cracks
Of her sterile life.
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Brandy_wine reviewed Version 1 -
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GMNProjects reviewed Version 1 -
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“and such a jones to prove” Jonesing is a way of describing the need for medication for social continue.
I would suggest adding how (at times) you laugh at this subpression inspite of all the pain; I would like that level of relief in your writing. Have you ever been funny?
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CharlesB reviewed Version 1 -
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This was awesome! The wordage was excellent! I actually went to you myspace page and listened to teh song as I read it… which was fuckin badass, by the way.
I loved the imagery.
“The weekend peeled away just like an orange rind
And left those juicy jewels”
This song rocked my face off…
Amandalinq reviewed Version 1 -
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Pretty damn good. You got me wanting to check you out on myspace. It’s very interesting how depression can creep in on a seemingly perfect life. It’s really hard to fight that feeling on your own, when your dissatisfied and don’t really have control of your life. I’ve been there. You could have been describing me three years ago.
I like it. You might be getting a friend request from me on the ole myspace.
keep it up.
Thelostsoul reviewed Version 1 -
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I really liked this. I felt the lyrics get stronger through the last 2 sentences of each stanza. It kind of made me sad for her by how you describe how she used to be happy when she was younger but I did have trouble connecting the meaning “On the force that through the green fuse drives the flower?”
jayne reviewed Version 1 -
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the lyrics are really quite powerful. It has been written really well, i cannot wait to hear it on myspace. thank you for sharing this. overall I loved it.
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