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Death is near; he calls my name in the screams of dying men. They echo through the blood soaked ground and escape in the chill of the night. I will greet him, death; with a passionate heart and a prayer on my lips. I am too young to die, but are not life and death a mere reflection in God’s eye.
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nettieoneg reviewed Version 1 -
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a little cliche…. how much thought have you really given to death. watch it happen anywhere and it’ll send a chill down your spine. we who haven’t suffered greatly like those who are chronically ill or those who are elderly, cannot speak on death.
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Willow_Wren reviewed Version 1 -
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This reads more like poetry or opening prose of a story rather than a quote. Not sure I really quite understand this. How do screams of dying men call your name? Is it just that they are a reminder of death? Why is the ground blood soaked? Why are you greeting death? Has he called upon you at this time? You say you are too young to die, are you really dying now? As to what is a reflection in God’s eye is perhaps too broad a statement to make, and minimizes the most powerful events in life, birth and death, to mere nothingness in God’s eyes I fear. Not sure where you’re going with this.
evanescencerose reviewed Version 1 -
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I found this quote to be a bit odd-it seemed as if you were trying to copy emily dickinson with personifying death in the way that she does, however i was more so confused by your idea than impressed. Though you did reveal a great mastery of diction and word flow, it felt more as though you chose your words based on their connotations rather than to reach a deeper understanding. It also felt that you went back on your words, first showing death as a vicious and cruel being, but then you say you wait for him, and then you go back again saying “i am too young to die”. perhaps better sentance structures could solve this problem.
mithie9 reviewed Version 1 -
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The first thing I thought of when I read this quote was Vietnam. That type of image can stir plethora of feelings for soldiers and people who lived in that time, so good job with that. Although, on the last sentence I feel as if there is an interruption in flow. Maybe you meant for this, but there is probably something you could add. That is up to you. Overall, I like it, it really invokes an image of war without all the typical glory that goes along with it.
zoli reviewed Version 1 -
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Damn. I was not expecting that. I would love to see what this is attached to, if anything. I am writing a novel as we speak about fear of death and dying and I have read half a dozen books on the subject in the last six months. What you wrote belongs in a book somewhere.
Great work,
Zoli Rozen
www.zolirozen.com
kan8 reviewed Version 1 -
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its really good but it feels like im on some battle field but then you say your to young but your going to meet death
its a little unclear but still just the first 2 sentences are really cool
blue04 reviewed Version 1 -
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hi there,
let me just start with wrighting really isn’t my forte..but for what it’s worth..
oh.. and your my first review..so be paticent
the first part..”screams of dying men” i like that it brings up visuals.
“the blood soked earth” was for my tast a little too gory..almost expected??
what i thought was intresting was the last part “passionate hart and a prayer on my lips..
whith a subject like death you expect blood and gore…it’s nice to put a twist on it. passionate hart and death… reflection in gods eye another good visual
i hope this helps blue04
p.s. please forgive the spelling
anirban_ray reviewed Version 1 -
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It’s a good thought. However, it seems that the last line is a question rather than a statement. If it’s a statement then it’s too esoteric to carry any real meaning. God’s eye can be a metaphor at the most. So what is God’s eye for you?
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