Poetry / BUYING TIME (Analysis)
camouflaged perfectly,
nestled in the secluded country
of rocks, bushes, and trees…
a fort, we believed
to be of great proportions.
We were The Warriors;
I was Blaze.
I was the best friend
of Lion-O and Cheetara, of
April and Leonardo.
We were superheroes
to the lost children of
this wretched place.
We set up laser barriers for
intruder detection, but
I realize, now,
those tripwires of string
and bottles and cans
were simply
buying us a little time,
enough for a solitary moment
of joy, of youth…
anything to keep us
an extra minute
from his fists.
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I like It! good rhythm , the words of choice is good. all around i thought it was good…the only thing i didn’t like about was “We set up laser barriers for
intruder detection,” i didn’t think the word laser really flowed well with the scene you painted in my mind…but overall i liked it, It really made me think too “hmm, what could this poem be about?”
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