Humor/Satire / My sweet friend

I there is anything funny about this is must be L4, unless her character is something much different from the depiction you have given to us. Besides not being very humorous, it is somewhat touching that you have a good friend. And it seems to me she has quit an imagination.

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June 21, 2008

by wise2owls

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She has a tendency to make mountains out of molehills and worrys something like a Jack Russell terrior.

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Nixee seems to be an asset. Anyone who can turn a mountain into a molehill is allright in my book.  I think it would be great if you could write in more detail about her. For example what are some of her most memorable insights?

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June 20, 2008

by wise2owls

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I really don`t know her that well.  I like the fact that when she sees something she tells you straight out if she likes it or not.  She is one very special lady.

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Sweet. Wouldn’t be nice if all of our friends would qrite such a thing for us?

There is no meat to this. She is still 2d to me.

I don’t know how this is humor or satire but it is a good poem. Maybe change the genre and you might get better reviews, I just don’t see the humor…

I hope she’ll be my friend too.
I like you’re use of words but I get a little lost in the timing on the fourth line. Thanks

I think that by saying “of an insighful mind” does not fit with “making mountains into molehills.”  I think of insightful people as usually overthinking things and therefor doing vice/versa.  Maybe use a syn to problem solving or dilligent instead?

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June 14, 2008

by JessicaHumiston

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On a second read, I lied.  I like it the way it is.  good job.

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I fail to see the humor honestly. Maybe life has beaten me into a pulp of a man, but not rally humorous. Good poetry, but not designed for this category.

The first lines, ‘Nixee, what a soft-spoken gal…making mountains into molehills’ were interesting and made me want to read more.  The last two lines, ‘she is…she’ll always be one.’ left me feeling flat.  Those lines were not the “more” that I was looking for.  Tell me about Nixee.  Why is she humorous or whatever it is that Nixee is to you.  After reading your poem, Nixee is still unknown to me.

Not so sure why it’s humor.. it’s actually more of a sweet, sentimental piece, if you ask me. The turn on making mountains into molehills is cute (but I think “in to” – 2 words). You kind of lack a parallel structure here… both in form and content. Have you considered   making a narrative? Expanding into a story about Nixee (even in poetic form).