Poetry / Numb Nights

I Have Erased So Many Nights
And Made New Ones
That I Will Forget About
Once The Sun Introduces Itself.

Its Harder Balancing Life
Than Balancing My Steps At 4am.

God Its Such A Hard Taste To Swallow
But Sweet Feelings It Brings
To A Smile That Fulls Everyone.

It Even Fulls Me With A Numb Night
That I Know I Will Go Back To,
Like A Crckhead
Looking For That Perfect Hit.

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May 15, 2008

LAluver4ever

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LAluver4ever reviewed Version 1 - Read 100% of the Item

I really liked it – you definitely have talent. Good job.

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May 05, 2008

william_roger_riley

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william_roger_riley reviewed Version 1 - Read 100% of the Item

man, i have lived this poem more times than i can remember….

Only a couple things that may need attention: instead of “full” as in to be filled, use fool, as in to trick (unless you meant to use it in the sence to fill someone up with the deception that things are okay, then touche and bravo) and the other thing is that you forgot the “a” in crackhead.

very personal, very real, very humanistic relativity. write like this anymore and we’ll be seeing your book somewhere with high regards.