Haiku/Senryu / Feeling like putty

lovers soften, yield
inhibitions surrendered
embracing desires

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May 09, 2008

Harold_P

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Harold_P reviewed Version 1 - Read 100% of the Item

The first line does feel a little disjointed, and I was unsure how the piece related to the title or the explanation. It read more like a romantic senryu of someone head over heels in the Romantic poets kind of way. I do like the second line however, it wields an emotional power.