Novel Treatments / the relationship from hell (Analysis)
I can feel her icey blue eyes piercing into the back of my head, as if I yet again have messed up in some deleriously horrendous way. I slowly turn toward her and raise my eyes to meet hers. The beautiful blue eyes she once had have turned to a grayish harsh tone. I ask a bit hesitantly,”Whats wrong?”
”Like you don’t know? Wait of course you’re gonna try to play the innocence card aren’t ya? You think I’m an idiot, don’t you? Seriously if you are going to cheat at least have some tact!”
”Cheat? Are you out of your little mind? You think I’m cheating? When would I have the time to do that? Between work, you, the baby? Yeah my whole five minute that I walk out the damn door for a cigarette, yeah Aliah I’m getting a quicky in then!”
”Don’t fuck with me Brandy, you think this a game, don’t you?”
”I’m getting tired of this shit, you have no reason not to fucking trust me! You need to find some way to get your guilty concience under control. I am the one who goes to work then comes home feeds the damn baby, gives her her bath, plays with her, then puts her to bed, then i get stuck cleaning the damn mess, and still you want me to rub your back or make love to you? Did you ever once think maybe I would appreciate some gratitude? Did you ever notice that I stay up all night with you when you can’t sleep even if I have to be at work at 6:30 in the morning? Have you ever thought hey maybe I should make dinner or clean the house before Brandy gets home? Ever? Yeah you need to think twice before you get shitty with me I’m tired of it. I can’t keep doing this Aliah, I just can’t things have to change. They really have to change and no more of this you change for a day or a week and then back to the old shit, I’m getting old before my time because of this, I have to start thinking of my life. I have to start worrying about my health. Because at this point I’m gonna be dead before I hit 30.”
”What do you mean my guilty concience? Yeah you go to work but I have her the entire time you are at work!”
”Ok you’re right you have her the entire time I’m at work you were the one who got knocked up and had her not me.I love her to death but dear when I come home and the baby has shit thrown from one end of the house to the other, plates of food squished into the damn carpet yeah damn right I give you no credit for watching her, because if you were she wouldn’t have made the mess. And your conscience remember whos computer you get on when you download your damn pictures from your little chatting scenarios. Yea and whos picture do you think I have seen? Huh?”
A couple of seconds of silence pass as I am getting even more furious, I keep waiting for her to explain it to me in some way try and make things better to act like she cares, to love me the way I have loved her, it doesnt happen. So I started get so angry and upset that I am crying as I mutter, “Tammy why the hell would Tammy be on here huh? Of all people in the world Tammy! Say something damn it please explain it please. I can’t deal with lies Aliah if you love me how could you? How could you with her of all people? Please explain it!”
I could see the entire tone of her face change it wasn’t just the shit I got caught look, this was the I really am hurting you aren’t I look. The oh my god you do love me look, the I can’t believe I just fucked up look. It was the look that made me fall to my knees and cry and pray that this was a nightmare. It was the moment that I felt like the world has come in on me and crushed my heart. this was the second that nothing else mattered except for silence. I needed silence and she didn’t get it. I needed to be alone and she couldn’t comprehend it. This was the moment I was ready to take my own life but god told me no. This was the moment I became a new me. The moment that as bad as it hurt I am greatful for it.
”Brandy I …. I….......didn’t mean to hurt you. I love you. I do love you and Macy loves you too. Please don’t do anything and leave us, I’m sorry I’ll stop, I’ll change I care to much to let you leave me.”
I’m on my damn knees pretty much having a melt down and this crazy bitch really said this stuff. I care to much keeps rolling through my head Macy keeps rolling through my head. And then I am beyond anger beyond fury I am so undescribably pissed off that she is trying to not really take claim to her actions. Shes trying to brush them off. “You didn’t mean to hurt me? You didn’t mean to hurt me? Are you fucking serious? Are you that stupid or that cocky? You didn’t think that you cheating on me would hurt me. You didn’t think that cheating on me with a supposed friend of ours would hurt me? And don’t you dare bring Macy into this, that baby will always have a spot in my heart. That baby is part mine now. That baby calls me mommy. That is my daughter regardless of what I decide happens here and you better remember that.”
Aliah trys to walk over to me and comfort me. Smart isn’t it who trys to comfort the one that you just emotionally killed? “Baby i love you, baby I’m sorry baby baby I said I’m sorry. Will you speak to me? Will you hit me kick me let me know something.”
I sit in silence staring at the white walls that apparently have very thin lines going through them from the strokes of the paint brushes, I stared at them pretty hard trying to collect my thoughts. I can’t leave where will I go…. I can’t stay because I can’t look at her, oh god Macy just heard all of this. Shit I need to make sure shes okay I didn’t hear her crying but I need to check. I walk into Macy’s bedroom and look in her little bed, thank God shes’ still asleep. Ok shes asleep so what time is it. Hmm only a little after 10:30 you know what i want a beer. I could really use one right now. I walk into my bedroom and grab my jacket, all the while Aliah is staring at me. “I’m going to get a beer, I may or may not come home tonight I’m not sure if I want to be around you.”
”I understand. Brandy I really am sorry, I love you and I hope you know that. I love you please look at me when I say that, I love you.”
”Whatever bye”
I walk through the yard and up the driveway still dripping down the side of my face. I reach into my purse as I reach the end of my driveway and I grab a kleenex and I attempt to make myself look remotely decent. Then I light up a cigarette and start walking. Within the 7 minute walk from my house to the bar i had smoked probably 4 or 5 cigarettes. I get to the bar where a few friends are at and I immediately walk to the bathroom and make myself look as if I haven’t shed a tear. I go up to my friends and greet them and I order my beer. “So hey Phil, Henry, Laurie, Cadey, Devin! How are you guys?”
Everyone is just staring at me and they each do their little spiel of great, or okay. Then Devin looks at me slides her hand into mine and says,”Whats wrong? And don’t you dare try to pull the tough act on me!”
”Dev please not now I just want to have a couple beers and I will tell you about it later.”
”Brandy hunny its not good to try and drink away your problems, If you want to its ok you are an adult but I am here for you.”
”Dev I … ,”tears slowly form a line down my cheek,” I just …. Aliah just…... We just….. she cheated on me. She fucking cheated on me.”
” Oh my god,” Dev jumps off her stool and hugs me. She grabs me by the hand and grabs our beers and she leads me over to a table. “Are you ok, what… when… with who?”
”I … I feel dead inside right now. What did I do wrong? What does Tammy have that I don’t?”
”Oh hunny no, you did nothing, you loved her with all your heart. You are one of the greatest woman I know so don’t start that. But Tammy are you talking about Tammy Tammy? Tammy thats in our group? Oh lord!”
”Yes Tammy the backstabbing bitch Tammy. The whore Tammy. The I…... ,” I start choking up a bit,” I can’t belive my own friend would do that. I can’t believe that. Oh wow this is karma. Oh my god this is karma.”
”Brandy what are you talking about? Karma? What did you do?”
” This was years ago, I was so immature and I was an asshole and I had slept with my best friends boyfriend. Oh my god I feel sick to my stomach how could I do this to someone else I’m a horrable person.”
”Brandy you are not the same person you were then. You have changed so much. You are a loyal fun loving protector and fighter and survivor you are a strong woman. Remember you are my dadadada super lesbian. Come on you always smile to that.”
” Damn it Dev I love you, you are the greatest friend anyone could ask for. To bad you’re straight. And even worse you’re Jer’s.”
”Awww I love you to now cheer up. Karma does not make up for what she did to you. She has no excuse for it. You treated her like royalty so do not blame your self you hear me.”
”Damn what are you my mom now , with this you hear me shit?”
”There we go cheers, To being happy”
”To great friends”
”To where the hell have you been Brandy? You get engaged and promoted and drop off the face of the earth.”
”Hey Taylor, we need to talk so please do not drink.”
So let me tell you about Taylor he is one of the sweetest men alive. He is overly emotional and gets a little to protective of his friends. Mainly me because he thinks of me as a little sister since I live so far away from my family. Taylor is also Tammy’s husband. Yes the one in the same Tammy. And I am the lucky lady that gets to let him know his wife and my fiance are cheating on us. Oh and by the way they are cheating with each other. Oh yes this is going to be fun.
”So Taylor where is Tammy?”
”She went over to your house apparently Aliah needed to talk to her. They seem like they are getting along really well. I’m happy my lil sister’s fiance and my wife get along gives us more time to hang out.”
”Taylor I have no idea how to say this but… sit down hun.” Taylor looks at me in the most lovingly concerned way. He could tell I was hurting, he could see the fear in my eyes as I could see the same in his. He had no idea of what I was getting ready to say and I no idea of his reaction. “I have no idea how to say this, so I’m just going to say it. Tammy is sleeping with Aliah. I kind found out yesterday when I was cleaning out the computer, they have pictures on there. I confronted Aliah already she tries to brush the subject off. I know how bad this hurts and if you want to talk just remember I am going through this right along with you so I’ll be here for you.”
”What? When? Where? How long? No no no way Tammy and Aliah no shes straight, she doesn’t like woman. Oh my god shes at your house lets go.” Taylor grabs my hand and I grab Devs. ”You have to come with me Devin, please I need you.”
Devin throws some cash on the table and the three of us go out the door and we walk to my house. The sky had gotten as dark as I have ever seen it with only one star very faintly shining in the distance. There were a few gray clouds hovering overhead and it was obvious that it was about to storm. We got to the driveway of my house and Tammys car is sitting right there. I was so tempted to pick up a brick and put it through her windshield but I knew that would affect Taylor too and I didn’t want them to have the satisfaction of knowing how bad I was hurting.
We walk down the drive and we get to the door and I paused. I think I must have turned extremely pale and I know I was terrified of what I was about to walk in on. I leaned over the railing of the porch and I started to vomit. I whiped my face with my sleeve and prayed to god to make me strong enough to endure this. I took one last deep breath and opened the door up and the three of us walk in. There Tammy was sitting on my couch holding my daughter talking with my whatever you want to call her at the time. Taylor grabs my hand and I clutch his for dear life. Devin is looking at me and Taylor just waiting for instruction. Aliah has the look of death, like she is terrified of what may come to be. After a few seconds of uncomfortable silence Devin offers to take the baby to her house until things are calmed down.
”Thanks Dev I appreciate it heres her diaper bag if she gets to be to much call me and I’ll come get her. Do you mind if I stay at your house tonight, I don’t think I can sleep in my own bed god knows whats gone on in there.”
”Yes thats finr Taylor you can stay with me too if you like.”
”Thanks Devin I might take that offer up.”
Aliah and Tammy keep giving each other glances like whats our story going to be type looks. “Brandy I am so sorry this meant nothing to me. She means nothing to me I can’t live without you. I won’t live without you.”
”Yes you can, and yes you will. You are dumb as hell to invite the whore into my house after I find out you are sleeping with her. Then you seem to think that I will take you back. Fuck you and the whore you rode in on.”
Tammie chimes in,” Brandy I am sorry I never meant for this to happen but I fell in love with her and I love you, you were a great friend but you know you can not stop matters of the heart.”
”Fuck you and your matters of the heart, since when is a married woman supposed to not control her sexual urges to another married woman?”
Taylor looks at me and he lowers his head and covers his face he is just now understanding how real this whole deal is. I have never seen my dear friend this hurt. To the point where he can not even speak. Taylor is never quiet,so this is pissing me off. Aliah asks me if she can speak to me alone and Taylor nods his head at me showing me he wants his alone time with Tammy to figure out what happened.
”Brandy I am so sorry I will do whatever it takes to show you I love you. I will change, I love you more than anything in the world. I know that I am the luckiest person in the world to have you. Please give me one last chance.”
”Yea one more chance,one more chance. If you couldn’t change the way you get attitudes with me why would I think that you are capable of being faithful?”
”So what are you saying?”
”I said it earlier I give up, I am done its over. You can move back to your mommas. I’m gonna stay over Devs tonight so you can start packing.”
”I want my baby to be home tonight shes not sleeping any where else.”
”I’ll have Jer drop her off.”
”No you have to, you need to tell her goodbye yourself and you need to hear her screams when she wants you to put her to bed.”
“I’ll drop her off then I will bring her here in a hour.”
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Get him to have an affair [make him a big executive or a big wig of some sort], then let her catch him, video-tape them, and let the video air on prime time. Then, after the law suits have been settled, let him move to California, and while hiking, with the baby, but the baby gets trapped in a mountainside mine shaft. It hits headline news and the mother goes in search of her daughter, but instead the husband/wife meets up and finds little Macy, who’s diaper is dirty, but otherwise unharmed. They decide to try dating again, though divorced or in the process, or something like that. That would be thrilling.
You wouldn’t find this appealing would you? Let me know.
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This is good work. I would love to read an entire book on this, if not see it made into a television series. It shows me that my life isn’t as bad as I make it out to be. Thanks for sharing!
I like the plot, but there are a load of grammatical and punctuation revisions to be made. I also would think it helpful if you defined the characters slightly more; I caught myself rereading the same parts to try and figure out who was who and who said what.
Like I said before, I like the plot. Obviously it interests me because I am the uber fag I have been picked out to be, but it also interests me for other reasons: you made such a realistic storyline to follow and then made it seem somewhat real (try and power it over with emotion; you can never have too much).
wow….relationship from hell is right. you kept me wanting to keep reading and hear more..very impressive.
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Aptly titled,this story.Lots of raw emotion displayed in this piece.Very real sounding scenario.A few spelling errors,nothing serious.Grammer is good.
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