Haiku/Senryu / Home Again (Analysis)

I often wonder if there is truly a market for Haiku.  That is, outside of elementary school.  The same can be said for the limmerick but I get numerous requests for reviews.  This one however, is different in that the slight description sets the mood for the symbolism which I like.  What can you say about a 5, 7, 5 other than you nail the requirements.  I do like the symbolism, however.

Short yet very appropriate. I can feel the conection even in these short lines and the feelings evoked show the power of words. Good.

I gave you a ten for your poem because of it’s unique imagery. This is a wonderful Haiku poem for everyone to ‘take a step’ into the pages of their memories.

The only critic I could give you on this poem is to remove the capitals at the beginning of each line.

Very lovely thought provoking poem.

Take care.

I read through this a couple of times until the image came into my mind. At first I didn’t quite get it, but then I got the feeling. the calling to house description made me imagine a mother noisily calling everyone to dinner as though she were announcing it to every wall in the house, from ceiling to floor.

Haiku’s are normally not my favorites but this one I truly liked. Even without the explanation the theme comes through. well done

I would like to study this art form more to better give a detailed review but the mood of this genre is inviting I want to pursue trying this for myself so it haad an influence that is what I can say.

You might want to change something to convey the fact that the writer has not been home for years

This isn’t very descriptive. If you wouldn’t have had the note I probably wouldn’t have understood it. Be descriptive. It doesnt mean write another paragraph and a half just be a bit more descriptive. Who? What? When? Where? Why?