Poetry / Strange Buddy

Its probably a bit too personal to you and lauras friendship for any outsider to really appreciate. I can see you can write though i would just prefer to read something that was less personal a more appealing to random people like me

Quaint, short, thoughtfully sweet.  Laura would probably love the contradiction of a quieter diva.  No criticism. I like it.  

First of all let me point out two mistakes in the poem. It is ‘sense’ not sence and it is “she keeps ‘on’ hopping” not ”...keeps ‘us’ hopping”. The poem is good overall.

When i hear the word “buddy” i don’t think of a girl, so when you described one, i was a bit surprised. Perhaps this is your intention? Otherwise, i think it’s cute, even though you mispelled “sense” in the first line. heh. <3 ames plaza.

First off, sense is spelled wrong. Secondly, it’s a bit repetitive. I don’t know if it’s because I don’t know this person, but this is not my cup of tea.

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June 20, 2008

by wise2owls

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That`s okay.  Sometimes I don`t get what an author is trying to say or sometimes I never was in that situation.  Any review is a good one.  Thanks for giving me your honest opinion.

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great wording and way of putting things. I had to read it twice to really get it. However it was entertaining.

I like the descriptive use of language, but in the end the piece doesn’t go anywhere.

The piece is a few nice (as in thoughtful) lines of descriptive writing about a friend. Nothing more and nothing less. I’m sure Laura will enjoy it.

As criticism goes, it could use some music to supplement the oft-repeated words and phrases (e.g., “diva of sorts” and “different drummer”).

It was good but write more details to describe the woman.

This is simple but very entertaining. Very good use of repetition, a..a..an..a..she..she.