Poetry / My Sexuality Did Not Lay Right Today (Analysis)

As I take drugs….I never understood their value.  In instance of curing what ails…..ills….of the soul,mind or bady. I wish I could climb into your skin …..just long enough for the psychosis tpo penetrate my core.  As for poetry… I appreciate your writing.  As for understanding….your desire your message…I am left trying to get there.  But your style is contemporary.  Maybe I need psyke drugs!!!  I like it al the same.

keep writing

First off, I understand this piece intimately.  Your word choice is solid, not confusing like much of the poetry I’ve read.  I must admit I don’t understand the title in how it relates to the poem.  Otherwise, good work.

i think this poem addresses one of the biggest issues of our time and that is prescription drugs, esp. anti psychotic drugs and painkillers.  it speaks to alot of people out there

I think a lot of teens and young adults can relate to this.

It is not – should be They are not?? [Words plural]  This works better. Nice.  The line about white pills, I like….

Very interesting.  I liked this a lot. One thought, I think the openiing needs a bit of work (the first four lines).  It scans a bit less comfortably than the rest I thought.

Not really sure what you were going for here. I don’t necessarily get what the title has to do with the piece.  In addition, I think one must be careful when referencing narcotics without coming through with something substantial.  There are far too many drug abusers producing extremely effective art and so it instantly puts you in a catagory where you either have to perform suffiently up to snuff or it comes across as some kind of sympathy ploy.  If your drugs aren’t having a unique and enlightening effect on your musings, than I am not sure if it’s worth sharing.  You were obviously going for something, I am just curious what that was.

Very good! My favorite stanza is the second and my favorite line in that stanza is “the phsycosis of the day helps me forget that Im insane”. This poem is good but it could use commas to help the flow. So the reader knows when to pause and when to keep reading. I was using the end of the lines to tell me when to pause but then at points it didnt sound right to pause, so you might want to think about add a few commas. Great job I love it! Best of luck to you!