Quotes / The broken path (Analysis)

I like the quote a lot. I have seen similar quotes which are referring to religion, but to me this seems unique and would certainly give a good indication of the character’s perspective. Grammatically, I would probably write it exactly the same way, though I think many people would say the comma is unnecessary.

Your book…heh…

If this is a dark character within your book, it says a lot about who he is, and his ignorance.  I have just read a poem written by a soldier who has killed the enemy in Iraq, and the poem pretty much talked about the damage that the killing has done to his heart.  If this is what your character is, then it is perfect for him to say that.  Good luck

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July 25, 2008

by MisterP

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For those who don’t venture to the front line then fantasy machismo dressed up as bravado is probably the next best thing.

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What? That doesn’t make sense to me. You LIKE the killing that goes along to achieve peace? Maybe you were being sarcastic, or maybe you just like war and violence, which is sick.

And honestly, although people say that all the time, if you want peace you must prepare for war, i don’t think that’s true at all as we don’t have peace and we are at war right now.

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July 20, 2008

by Gavinswar

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hey did you read the notes for the reviewer? Let me guess you didnt, This would have made perfect sense were you not skimming through trying to rack up points.

July 24, 2008

by Arkaidy

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oh, oh god, you are so clever, I just, don’t know how to think of a come back.

stabbed in the heart on the internet!

goodbye cruel world …....

July 24, 2008

by Gavinswar

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Thanks, your doing the world a favor.

July 24, 2008

by Arkaidy

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man, i just can’t get over how smart you are!!!

July 24, 2008

by Gavinswar

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No need to for you to struggle with it anymore, you have made it clear you inablity to deal with things intellectually.

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You know—it’s true. To get to peace there has to be blood shed in the eyes of men. It’s terrible, but how it is.

It sounds like a line from a sinister villian I would like to see what it is attached to. A little demented I wonder what kind of charecter in your book said these words.

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June 25, 2008

by Gavinswar

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hes more of an antihero, but borders on villian at times, depending on how you look at him.

June 25, 2008

by Undone

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I would love to read it all!

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WOW.
this is insanely accurate.
we hide war behind peace hoping no one will notice the bulge underneath the rug.
the only think i like about peace is that its just a witty punchline to a terrible joke.

keep sharing!

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June 14, 2008

by Gavinswar

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This isnt meant to be political, but i like your qoute as well.

June 15, 2008

by miamonster

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I know, but it could still be quoted as such.

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I don’t like this quote.
It’s sad. =/

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June 10, 2008

by Gavinswar

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Thanks it may not be for you. I doubt that you would like my type of writing.

June 10, 2008

by Gavinswar

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Thanks it may not be for you. I doubt that you would like my type of writing.

June 10, 2008

by Gavinswar

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Thanks it may not be for you. I doubt that you would like my type of writing.

June 10, 2008

by Gavinswar

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Thanks it may not be for you. I doubt that you would like my type of writing.

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Okay so out of all the quotes I have read now, this is my new favorite. I think that nothing should change. It is actually very dark from the authors perspective…

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June 03, 2008

by Gavinswar

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I am glad you liked it for what it is. Its meant to be dark without humor, or irony.
Thanks for the review

June 03, 2008

by TiffVicious

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Yeah I could tell it was meant to be that way, and I don’t think I would have liked it if it were not for that dark undertone!

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killing is a strong word but used good.

Made the brutal side of me chuckle in appreciation. Great line.

My only offer for improvement: delete ‘that’ from this line and the rest of your writing. It’s a word that isn’t needed in this context, and only slows the reader down. I always do a ‘search and replace’ for this word when I’m done writing anything of length. It’s a first-draft-only word.