Poetry / Poseidon
The chains were locked
The gates were closed
A dark cast emerged
The seeds were sowed
Nothing came from this loss
Nurtured and fed the disease
No beauty bloomed from the depths
Of loneliness and greed
I walked beside myself this time
As thought I lived in a dream
Because no matter how deep I inhaled
No others heard me scream
Inside my head I knew it was best
Though my heart heavily bled the loss
I feared the light and dread the dark
Pleaded the pain would stop
And then came inspiration
Emerged through disaster
Sustained secure hope
As my heart raced faster
Behind a warm face
Of an unknown kind
A welcoming smile
Enlightened my mind
My darkened view of grey and black
Shades seen through solemn eyes
Acquired a vibrance never known
Colors took me by total surprise
With one touch, I grew wings
Lifted myself from the ground
All the years I spent searching
And my true self is what I found
What fails to deliver arrant death
Brings about an unknown strength
A brilliant diamond formed from clay
As fickleness faded by length
I was once molded into a shape
With a perimeter that didn’t trace me
And though I knew it just wasn’t right
This taken form I continued to be
Not until the rivers ran red
Did I allow myself to see
The ruby drops of saddened grief
Colored the obvious for me
Hanging on with a loosening grip
To a cliff side above the sea
It wasn’t until the last finger slipped
That I fell away so free
The rippling tide broke my fall
Carried my weakened body ashore
And in these new, protecting arms
I found ‘mi amor’
Every fingertip that touched my skin
Left an imprint of sheer passion
Every kiss placed atop my head
Given in orderly fashion
I tried to speak
My voice made no sound
I was at a loss for words
For a miracle I had found
Waves crashed furiously at our feet
And wild horses ran out of the sea
I feared for my life, for my love
But he let no harm come to me
With a wave the stampede parted
And the rumbling broke free
We stood safely within a clearing
Just my love and me
He held me close
Never left my side
Stood sturdy though shaken
By the earth, cracked open wide
All the emotions I bled for years
Flooded the crevice of doom
And when I began to lose my grip
Truth came in full bloom
My love swept me from the rivers
Of greed, anguish, and defeat
He lifted me high above the ground
Set me tenderly on my feet
I knew strength within his presence
And beauty within his heart
For all the time he spent with me
Kept me from falling apart
He was a powerful king
I, a pauper and a fool
Never thought he’d glance twice
From atop his pedestal
He took my hand into his
Transforming me into his queen
Showered me in a light of love
A brightness I’d never seen
I was beckoned from tarred roads
From a past of boiling hate
I was pulled from the depths of slumber
From a past of entailed fate
I was destined to be a slave
In a calm world gone irate
Every demon that mouthed my name
Held a piece of empty slate
Envying the chance to make a mark
To leave behind a deeper scar
Sickly beings whispered words
And chased away the stars
Nothing left to wish upon
No moonlight washed across my face
Yet a golden ray shined down
Warmed that desolate place
In return, I gave my heart
The very core of me
I loved him more everyday
His love had set me free
He is my protector
My savior, whom I adore
And every time the ocean crashes
Our love washes ashore
I shriek in shades of lavender joy!
To the world I must confide in
I fell in love with a God
He is my Poseidon
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Hello my friend. A great job as usual. what I saw as far as spelling and typos.
Line 4- seeds sown
Line 5- need a prior reference to “loss”
Line 9- Beautiful imaging and clarity
Line 11-Possibly use ‘exhale’ I’d mention for you.
Line 15-dreaded
18- needs more concise a) Emerging from/disaster
b) Emerged beyond this disaster
only suggestions.
19- sustained ‘a’
33- thank you Katy, never knew there were two different arrant/errant.
35- don’t need ‘about’ actually.
Love this poem. Great imaging at work. Lines 40-52 are incredible! Ruby drops..ripples…very exuberant choices of words for this topic.
Idea- why not add a space every four lines to match the rhyme and meter throughout?
Highlight on 2 great lines; ’...destined to be a slave
...calm world gone irate.’
Gives me an idea for a similar poem I have like yours. Doug.
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