Poetry / Teapots

What a sweet/sad little poem. It’s cute with a almost disturbing twist. Someone needs to slap Judi. How very ungracious.

But…what a wonderful tribute to forgiveness for a rude gesture. I enjoyed this a lot.

As one of many in a book it might be fine. I can envision how many teapots you would need for this to fill a book however. LOL

Only questionable: “appropre”. Aside from not seeming to fit, is it the right word choice?

5/7/9

In the effects to get your feelings across about your friendship or the break of it you did an ok job. The problem I see here thought is that it all seems so forced. There is no natural flow to this piece. In some places it seems you could cut a word or two out in others maybe add one. Wish you luck on tightening up this piece.

I like it, more of a short story, maybe a children’s book.

cool. i like that. wish i could write like that lol. awsomeeeee

i like this new version so much… ungrateful friends are not really friends at all.

this flows better, the visuals are more clear… i like it.

Friends change and so will you but all you can do is hope and hope and hope.
Even those who think hope is lost still hope.

I really enjoyed this peice, it’s raher whimsical in a sense.
It’s different than the kinds of poems I’m used to.
You should definetly get it published.

First of all, I enjoyed reading this piece. It has a cheeky, intelligent style that flows from your pen in what seems to be a steady flow. The only problem that I had with it was that it didn’t seem to be able to make up its mind on the tone that it would take – it seemed both tragic and humorous. This may be the very path that you wished for it to take, and in that case it did, but if this is not what you intended…. It is what I read into it. At any rate, it is an impressive poem, well done.

I thought it was a bit on the sentimental side.

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May 31, 2008

by BillRetoff

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This is simple and light. I like it. You misspelled the word apropos. Just need to add the “s” there. It reminds me of a children’s book with its simplicity.