Poetry / Set me Free (Analysis)
If this was the truth,
then something was wrong
because the truth was supposed to
Set you free
and all this did was
Seal you in
THe words passed through my lips like irreversible flowers
their full power not exposing itself until
well after being said
Freedom?
What was this freedom?
I am not free to say
what should be said
for saying that would
make a lie
out of everything I have said
The consequences now make up any burden
telling the truth may have lifted
They bear down on us.
Crushing the lives being held up
by thin lies and fragile truths
They are said now, but was it
Worth It?
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Ah, ‘Riss. I didn’t even realize this was yours until I started reading it.
Your structure could use a bit of work, in truth. It’s too broken for my tastes. I like poetry that flows very well. This one’s a bit hard to focus in on, and I had to pace a bit at your house while reading in order to get the tunnel vision sometimes required for absorption. Nevertheless, your message behind it is a good one, and you do well.
But yes, grammar, punctuation, so forth. Definitely.
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this piece was good..i like how there are questions. it makes it more interesting. good work ;)
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