Poetry / To Hesitate (Analysis)

nice and short, a sweet little poem.

to meet your criteria you would however need several of these to make them publishable, i mean, could you imagine opening a book and seeing just this inside? now that would be a shock :)

grammar wise, “What’s it like to hesitate till summers passed away”

should be What’s it like to hesitate <<’till>> summers passed away

while it is etymologically incorrect it does make more sense.

overall, good work.

line 2 feels weird. “vaporized”? But I love message and the rhyme.

This is great.  Kinda sticks in your head like a good limerick.  I love that you used vaporized in it and it worked ( for me anyways).  I would like to see this piece expanded.

need more stanzas
good very country
keep it up

Very nostalgic and melancholy.  I see no errors, but you could elaborate tho.

“To Hesitate”, a short poem which shows whimsy and some regret over missing some time in the present. Do not wait to see what happens.  Good imagry, wishing for yesterday not looking for today, or tomorrow. Thank you for the pictures you brought to mind.

wow! i love this! add more! i’d have given it all tens if you had made it longer… holy smokes that’s amazing. the rythm, the rhyme, the feeling, the background.

keep going!

This is a neat pithy poem which nicely captures the idea of hesitation.  Its got good rhythm and the rhyme works well with the shortness of the poem.  My only comment is that vaporized felt a bit of a harsh image an something gentler might be more appropriate…?

i really liked this, especially the lines of clovers burnt to hay. that is really good.

i feel like this at times, and its odd…im staring into summer, vision cloudy from the heat trails.  perhaps you are swami?

kudos on this.

I liked all but the last line.
In a piece this short it is really difficult to expose the thought you are trying to portray or the emotion you want to evoke.
I feel like you were on the verge threw the first 3 lines but never quite finished.

“It’s like the life you memorized but never saw it’s day.”

Just a thought
7/8/7