Lyrics / Cast Off the Spells (The Seventh Candlestick)

hi there,
i also wonder how these spells are hurting her so…are they demons?curses? in generalthough,,nice job,,keep writing,,jim

well i like it,,it’s a good start,,what spells are she asking to be free from?

I understand where this is coming from. The feeling is just there, and it is so passionate. I have been in this situation before and these lyrics re-capture it perfectly. I liked the last stanza
“A tear bleeds red in the waiting
Bruises kiss her pale white face
As trembling feet stroke the fount
Set me free”
THe lines here are so vivid, I can see these things in my mind. I love it.

Gio

its to short but the last verse was pretty good
just keep trying at it you’ll get better
try rhyming with words that are’nt used alot like smart words or
way of stuff it makes it more apealling and
in a contest can win you points

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May 21, 2008

by anonymous

Thanks for the comment. I actually write a lot, and have for quite a few years… that’s why I didn’t care for it all that much. The length is intended to keep the song at about 3-4 minutes, as opposed to some of the other songs I write which verge on 5+. There were reasons I kept this simple, but I really do appreciate the comments.

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being a musician, i believe that it is teh tunes that make the music, not the words. as far as teh words go, this is kind of a sad song don’t you think? what terrible tragedy must have occurred for her to cry so? and while i’m on that topic, don’t switch back and forth between me and her. it’s confusing. pick one and sit with it.

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May 21, 2008

by anonymous

theres to be quotes arround the chorus, the chorus is her voice

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I think it’s something that we can relate to – doubt, fear. Questioning faith. I think the chorus is my favorite part of this. The verses don’t seem to resonate as strongly.

Perhaps you could paint a different picture in the verses. Rather than just her falling down and crying, what about stuff she sees or stuff she’s experienced that make her question faith or existence of God.

And perhaps a later stanza can be her falling and crying?

You could work in some Doubting Thomas stuff in here, if you’re looking to do some more Biblical references.

The last thing I have to say is that I think the last stanza really needs to be poignant. You’re evoking strong emotions here – make the last stanza tie everything together.

Questions? I’d be glad to clarify.
Good luck with your revisions and I’d be happy to check it out again!

I wouldn’t change a thing.