Poetry / Widow (Analysis)

I don’t understand the story.  I would guess someone is seeing a spouse cheat.  The imagery is a little disjointed “my fingers still thorny” has no meaning to the reader.  Was there action?  She felt the icy feet of what on her lips? How did she come to taste the mangled blood?  How was the narrator’s stomach pummelled?  Who lived ever after? I would say that what is most missing is the plot or focus.  Even loose or short pieces require a logic path, so its drawing a conclusion even while its setting a mood.

I must admit the title threw me until I read the piece, which I found a touch hard to grasp until I’d read it a few more times.
Not a bad piece, but maybe it needs one, maybe two more stanzas in the middle to prolong the effect?

Then again, it’s just my opinion, which you’re entitled to completely disregard.

Cheers

It’s good the wording is good but for some reason I think you can add more to it, it just feels incomplete to me. I feel like we haven’t felt all that you’re feeling in this poem it’s like your opening up but as soon as your close to revealing the emotion you shut us out and I think the imagery within this piece is abit weak and could be better.

Either add more to this poem or shuffle things about and really put your emotions in there because I feel like your holding back and you shouldn’t you’ve come this far, keep going.

It’s a good poem.

Keep writing you have amazing talent