thank you very much… i’m doind a rewrite to clean it up a bit… thanks for liking it and for the encouraging review.
Poetry / Mother's Wrath
Mother’s Wrath
Come my children, come and see
all I have created and give to you freely.
One small thing I ask, use these gifts I give; wisely.
We thanked her daily
for the splendor at our feet
took only what was needed
for our families to eat.
We took not a thing for granted
the rising moon, nor setting sun
season’s change we celebrated
when the earth was young.
Then, with growing arrogance
we no longer thought
to pause and offer thanks
for all that she had wrought.
Take heed, my children, careful what you do
in complete disregard for all that I have given you.
Your thoughtless ways pierce my heart completely through.
We would not heed her warning
for it is pleasure which we seek
in things we take at any cost
to makes our live’s complete
Children come and see! Look what you have done?
With lust and greed and filth, you dim the rising sun.
Hear me now, for this is certain; soon, my wrath will come!
Her anger grew quite slowly
as her patience waned
unleashed with nature’s fury
as she had ordained;
volcanoes spew forth in disgust,
clouds of ash carry our fears
hurricanes howl their discontent
as heaven cries acid tears
With feigned ignorance we plead,
and in anger, shake our fists.
Why should tens of thousands die?
What have we done to deserve this?
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TiffVicious reviewed Version 1 -
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Your message is perfectly clear and beautifully written. I love how its told from mother natures perspective, it makes it unique. This is one of my favorites so far…I am intrigued by your talent for words. This is incredible. Its the kind of poem that makes you think about the deeper things in life.
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sinfulpisces reviewed Version 1 -
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Although I am not a fan of rhymes in poetry, it works in this one because of the subject matter. I am so interested in what Mother Earth has to say that I don’t CARE that she is rhyming. This is a feat for me! I think this is a great poem and I am glad you are bringing attention to a very important political and global issue!
vickiebellew reviewed Version 1 -
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I may not earn a point on reading this but it was a pure pleasure. I is written in the style of the way I like to write and it contains a heartfelt lessen. In fact I have start it and never finished. I guess that was because you were supposed to write it no me. Great work.
Riddlebox reviewed Version 1 -
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A very well written piece, mother’s wrath…. I was thinking it would be something about a mother and her children but then it was about mother nature and our destructive ways, very nice it should appeal to all readers.
gambelin_poet reviewed Version 1 -
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I see the point your trying to make very well…but I’m still confused
PrettyHateMachine reviewed Version 1 -
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I really like this because it gets to the heart of our greatest crime as a species. You provided great imagery, and while I couldnt quite wrap my brain around the tempo of it, your words ring true.
ConfusedConundrum13 reviewed Version 1 -
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Human nature is to destroy and take for granted. we get mad at the things we do.
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