Poetry / Needs Title!!!!

This is actually a morbid piece, but written in a way to cause the reader to wonder and continue reading. Why does the character “tremble at the sight”? At what is she looking? Why can she not look away? Why is the world spinning? I personally suspect suicide—”the ground is rough and cold” her head is bleeding,”the world spins again”, her “eyes (are ) unfocused, ears ringing.” She is in “pain.” I think the references to the world spinning are to vertigo she experiences while contemplating jumping from a great height, or perhaps to the experience of falling. Then, “the ground…”, head bleeding, “eyes unfocused, ears ringing…pain.” “the world spins again…” Perhaps a good title for this would be, simply, “Spin.” I am probably way off base, but these are my impressions.

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June 13, 2008

by Frendly_Bubbles

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Personally I have no idea what this is actually about, but your description of your impression are probably right.
I’m thinking of expanding this piece just a bit, what do you think?
Yes the reason for you liking this poem is clear and I like it as well :D

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