Hey, thinks so much for all your kind words.Yah, when I let myself dwell on it, it still kinda hurts…but,that is a guilt I have in a sense laid upon myself, I suppose….but still..thanks for your comment though,, it means alot!
Poetry / To Kiss the Pain (Analysis)
To kiss the hand was to kiss the pain
I couldn’t bring myself to bare
so it goes understandably,
I’m left with an inconsolable tear.
Still time has yet to fade away
the regret of not being strong enough
to kiss goodbye his soul.
In this place I face the pain
each day more that stares me cold.
I dare to find another reason
to excuse my incompleteness,
if my heart hadn’t beat so heavy,
if hot tears hadn’t blinded my eyes,
or confusion croweded my mind;
If I hadn’t felt so numb and unready
death coming to the undeserving,
life taken by the observing.
A decision made to fit the circumastance.
If I had laid that kiss perhaps,
Then my conscience could rest.
Instead of being locked in this feeling,
of unsobering unhappiness.
And in its place I face the pain
of not giving my last goodbye.
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perfct2u reviewed Version 1 -
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Very heartfelt. You clearly show the regret in not finishing your final farewell to your grandfather. It is hard to deal with this regret, but you give words to how it feels. I would edit to fix the mis-spelling of “croweded” in the line: or confusion croweded my mind. Otherwise a fitting tribute to such a loss.
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Hi there!
I liked this piece, tragity aside. You conveyed a great sense of loss, not able for emotional reasons, to say the proper goodbye, something that could haunt one forever. If this is a true occurance my heart goes out to you, such an emotional imprint… well done. me…
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To loose any one is hard, to loose a grandpa is heart wrenching. The tribute you pay to this wonderful man is humbling. The way that you tell the world how much you will miss this gent is wonderful. The amount of pain and heart ache is there. I mourn with you and hope you find solice. Thank you for reminding me of painful memories.
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Touching and sad. A nice tribute to your grandfather, the feelings are obvious and easily interpreted.
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This was written in such a way to make the reader feel the anxiety and sadness portayed in the poem. It opens up the fear of death and brings the reader to want to face it themselves. Well done.
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I love this poem I admire those who can write free verse although I cannot. Love the style.
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