My dear friend,
A pleasant day to you. I hope you’re having a fine day because I rarely remember you having a good one. You always seem to find something bad about everything.
I wrote this letter just to let you know how sorry I am for you. Ever since we became friends we’ve spent countless days talking with each other. We talked about your life, your problems and how wretched the world was to you.
As a friend I always did my best to hear you out. I listened to your every woe and discussed ways to remedy your situation. This we did almost every single day for 8 years straight.
I thought that I was getting through to you. That I was making a positive difference in your life. How wrong I was to believe that someone like me could help you change.
After such a long time you never changed your ways nor your outlook. You only pretended to be doing well. Deep down you’re still as rotten as the first day I met you.
What’s been eating you, man? Why can’t you give yourself a break? Haven’t you had enough misery to last a lifetime?
The problem with you is that you problematize everything. You always find things to rant about so people will listen to you. You rant and rant to the point that you devour your listener in the process.
I’m not a saint.
I’m just a human.
Humans can only take so much.
I’m not mad at you. I just feel bad because I was not much of a help at all. Someday you can find people who can reach out to you.
For now I think that you spend time reflecting on how to put your life in order. This time it’s best that you find answers you discovered yourself. When the time comes you will be in a better position to maximize your potentials.
I better give you space. I’ll always be here when you need me. You’re really a great guy did you know that? You just need to believe in yourself. Always remember that I’ll always be your #1 fan.
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It’s a very clear letter, except I don’t really understand the last paragraph. How is it that you are this person’s greatest fan if he is so negative? Perhaps it would help to specify what is great about him. Also, under what circumstances would you “always” be there for him, since it seems you are now pulling away?
I think it’s very good personal writing and that the categories of publishability do not apply, which is why I rated it low in those categories.
Most people can relate to this so as a reader I understand but it’s not very detailed, it’s not very deep and I can see why you were of no help. Besides being there for someone like that only makes them worse you’re what’s called an enabler. It needs a lot of work. The idea is good and the format as well but for me it’s only at the very early stages there is a lot of work that needs to go into it. Maybe more description on your relationship, where it began and how it developed. If this person is so negative why did you become friends in the first place? What was he so negative about? Did he have a past that could answer these questions?
I like the way you left your relationship open to him, whether he will continue with it or not. I’m like you, enough drama! Some people live for it, they must have chaos in their lives. You did a good job with the letter, it will make the person take responsibility for his failures, hopefully.
okay, not really sure whether you are truly angry with a friend or frustrated with him. not really sure whether he is truly ‘rotten’ meaning ‘evil’ or ‘bad’ or just bitter with the world and unhappy. “rotten’ is a rather loaded word so I need some clarification. It sounds like you were trying for a long time to focus a friend who has been unhappy on the beauty of life around him and that in doing so you became disillusioned and frustrated with his lack of progress. It is very difficult to try to do what you did for your friend and most often one ends up where you are….available if you are needed but no longer able to take on a role of spiritual adviser and emotional caretaker. If you are sincere that he is truly a great guy then I hope your friend changes in time for you to continue a friendship.
I sense a lot of frustration and pain in the writing. It is very palatable to the reader so this is a good thing. The writing is real and pulls the reader in. The sentences flow like a stream of consciousnesses and that makes the writing real but also keeps the readers on their toes to absorb it all. all in all a very heartfelt piece of non fiction, good luck with it and your friendship.
You do a good job of getting the raw emotion through to the reader. For such a personal piece that’s a good thing. You also provided a good glimpse into the background of your situation without giving too many details. I think most people have been in a similar situation as you and you make it easy for them to relate.
One bit of advice, you use a lot of strange word constructions. Phrases that are more complicated than they need to be and take the reader out of the piece. Since you’re trying to convey real emotion and a real situation, try using sentences that you would really use.
For example:
“A pleasant day to you.”
“This we did….”
“How wrong I was…”
all read kind odd. Try finding more natural ways to say these.
Keep it up.
Sometimes I see myself as a negative person. Most of the times I try to make my life seem crappy to make whoever I’m talking to feel better about themselves. That’s could be one of the reasons, he’s so negative. I liked this because it made me think about a problem most people have to deal with everyday and there’s really no right or wrong answer to this.
Normally, I have a problem with writing that’s completely abstract. In this piece, you mention no names, no places, no specific situations whatsoever, no images, nothing. Again, normally, I think that writing stands on the virtue of its being able to relate abstract concepts indirectly through effective imagery and metaphor. However, in this case, and I think due to the clarity, frankness, good grammar, etc. of this piece, it’s effective. I think perhaps its completely “bare” nature allows the reader to fill in so many blanks where they’ve had one, or ten, or one hundred identical situations, and so every word is a placeholder for the reader’s experience. I like that this piece establishes the notion that the writer is letting loose with a flood of potentially repressed opinions on the nature of the friend’s life. Overall, if you can write more pieces that have the same capacity for reader sympathy, you will be a successful author.
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