Thanks for your kind words :)!
No way am I going to ask for a refund, because I
like your review ;). Just be honest,
constructive and diplomatic and you won’t go wrong. And if your reviewee doesn’t like it, then it’s tuff. Cheers
Poetry / Thank you (Analysis)
Thank you all for your lovely reviews.
They were so good that I couldn’t choose
the ones I’d take out;
there is no more doubt
we all suffered from removed reviews.
To all the pedants:
It was nonsense poetry
not a limerick.
Your words are all still up; do please take note
my reviewee was not really that bad
just not very flattered by what I wrote
So that actually makes her quite a sad
Cow who missed the point of Urbis entirely.
I don’t dwell on that issue any more;
T’would be fun to you, but lame of me.
My outlook changed; I began keeping a score
of how many reviews I got in a day.
It was fun to read them, see the reaction
to “I Opened My Urbis Inbox Today”.
From you, I do note the presence of the unction
Many took over the system and hope that Urbis
Will consider taking some time to address this.
This was an experiment, from which I’ve learnt that
No real freedom of self-expression exists
Despite the assertions of others
because one may say what one
wants to say
but one must still follow form.
Take this passage. I’m entitled to define it
however I want
because of poetic licence
It’s free verse, right?
But others could and would argue
this is a piece of prose
with awful punctuation
and
inappropriate use of spacing.
How appropriate is it, then, to
define work and review criteria before posting it
In order to
steer reviewers to
say what you want them to say
indirectly
when they’re also entitled to their own opinions and they don’t need you to tell them how and what to think when doing a review
That’s patronising, non?
Ooh… bring on the written
Catfights! I only wrote this in free verse
because sonnets are too darn hard.
This time, I’ve chosen to not use italics and emboldened letters, but I’ve a big thanks to those reviewers who showed me what to do. Thank you for reading this far. The end.
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B_HDouglas reviewed Version 1 -
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This poem has a science fiction appeal, when the ‘system’ or ‘machine’ takes over on its own. I sense this would be just as alluring to an audience as a wordy appeal for resolution.
The first paragraph effectively introduces me to some issue at hand. The last two lines could be improved, they appear choppy.
The second paragraph fits very well to the entire message you give, and a clever choice of words with “pedant”.
Paragraph 3 I don’t know what “Your words are still up” means, but I understand your point as either ” I have your reviews, I’m moving on” or “say what you want, the fact is I did it?” At the end of the paragraph, I sense you resolved an old issue, and are better now for it.
In paragraph four, “No real freedom for self expression exists” is nice, so good job. The five lines after “want to say” should be deleted, due to their inapplicable innuendos you ARE proving wrong.
I agree; do, think, say, feel, act, any way you want, but from the looks of it, you have discovered that is exactly what everyone else is doing. Keep up the good work, and don’t take any wooden nickels…unless of course you are the machine.
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jokaking reviewed Version 1 -
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well I’m new to the site and I reviewed something yesterday and to my chagrin, I came back today to find a message in my inbox stating that my review was rejected :(... with that said I wholeheartedly understand where you’re coming from… oh and on a side note, please don’t return my review! loved the writing :o), keep it up…
shortnsweet46 reviewed Version 1 -
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hahaha I loved this. Creative and you have a great sense of humor. I love how you have the ability to write about anything and take your own creative spin on it. We talk about that alot in the writing classes I am in and I havent quite mastered that yet. Like I said though, clever. I liked it.
crimsonarchon reviewed Version 1 -
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Obviously your target audience for this work is ridiculously small. And I don’t think I’m part of it, since I don’t think I’ve ever reviewed your work before. But I like it.
P.S. I could give a damn whether you punctuate properly or not so long as you make me feel or think something provocative. And you did and I liked it so there :-P
derekosborne reviewed Version 1 -
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Well, I did laugh. Sort of like throwing a bone to a pack of wolves. I applaud the device. Now instead of being clever and going back to name four or five specific issues to ensure you do not refund I’ll just say good work. Original. Join us down at the URBIS Pub. We’ll hoist a few and sing one Claire’s crazy songs.
Blue_Eyes reviewed Version 1 -
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I am definitely with you on this one. When reviewing poetry, I try hard to stay away from my personal preferences, and focus on the actual content of the poem. Unfortunately, it can be difficult remaining objective when reviewing a subjective category such as poetry. The stricter poetic forms do require more of a technical eye, however it is generally best to focus on what is being said, not on how it is being said, when reviewing free-verse. I also rarely, if ever, add ‘reviewer’s notes’ when posting poetry, for the reasons you stated, and I rarely request refunds, unless they are mean-spirited. You definitely hit the nail on the head. Thank you. :)
shecomes_and_shegoes reviewed Version 1 -
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nice! i wouldn’t have thought to write a poem about urbis and reviewers but i enjoyed it and think you got your point across. the whole system is certainly interesting. i think the line about awful punctuation and inappropriate spacing is what sold me on the piece, because im pretty good at both of those things, haha. thanks for sharing!
J_Lynn reviewed Version 1 -
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hahahaha. Love it. It never would have occoured to me to write a poem about my fellow reviewers, but I have to say after reading yours I can understand the temptation. And you’re right, sonnets are too hard, Viva La Free Verse! Loved the sad cow part, and the bit about the Urbis Inbox. I actually was laughing out loud while reading the whole thing. I know I should be offering some constructive criticism or something but I think I enjoyed it too much to try to break it apart. Thanks! Keep on writting, whether sonnets or free verse!
NatyshaMarie reviewed Version 1 -
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i dont really have any commets
hippopotimoose_moo reviewed Version 1 -
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I completely agree. I’ve never read anything that states it tho. Thank you on behalf of all of us who have deleted entire poems (lymerick in my case) just because we had to follow their form. I tried to tell them that the lymerick had to evolve with the tymes but they wouldn’t listen. They told me it was drivel. I hate it when that happens.
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