Poetry / Reality Biter (Analysis)

There’s a lot of words in there for so few lines, I would either divide them up or just expand.

It’s a really good short poem but I think the structure of the poem could be better, it seems all over the place b\c the structure is not there but the poem is great. I like it theres nothing more for me to say really

Keep up the good work

Amy

I enjoyed reading this, it has a visual texture which is rare.  I imagined velvet paper as standing straight up fro static electricity.
The bi Q word, also rare to see.
I would like to see the third line shortened someway, it seems simple when compared with the others.  Maybe you can use a different word for cut.
It is an electronic piece; light and love refracted…brilliant.
I am impressed with this and would like to see it again if you revise it please let me know.  Thank you for the opportunity…great work.