Poetry / E

my first impression is much as the impression expressed by the poem…how the images we see from busses or trains in the city, where we see a face for maybe a second and then never again, how these are the images that usually not only stay with us but haunt us…as we want to be a part of that image, and there is the tragedy, or one of the many tragedies, of life…

very good poem
—mb

This poem speaks of a fleeting moment, so it is appropriate that it is a short piece. For a short poem it is formatted well and in an interesting manner. It is very ambiguous. Is it about ecstasy? A former lover who’s initial is E? It doesn’t really matter, as the readers are free to form their own opinions, and relate this piece to their own lives as they see fit. Nice work. :)

You have caught the chemistry of an encounter & how in a flash the illusion dissolved but the memory of that event is imprinted forever.

i think you did a nice job here.  everyone loves a good love peom

I really like this poem of love that has been separated. But I would suggest that you change the title because it doesn’t go along with the poem or the concept. Otherwise it’s a good poem.

The meaning is very clear and powerful. I feel that a little more should be added. I am not sure what exactly maybe elaborate on the meeting. Perhaps end the first part with drawn together by chance. Then start the second with something else. I think it is good but add a little more not too much. If you add to much more it might lose it’s power. But a little reworking I think it could be better!

I like this, it clarifies the love at first sight phenomenom. Only complaint, not enough poetic phrases sprinkled in. But, that’s not to say I didn’t really like it.

Did you mean “there were” in line 2?? As it stands, gramatticly, it doesen’t make any sense. Otherwise, nothing wrong with it . . . .

great poem
nothing to rework

I like the simplicity of this brief poem, a tragic tale of two lovers who meet yet  forever separated in time after a brief interlude? I want to know a bit more. You were there, who was that you? Describe him or her. Then you drop him/her altogether and talk about the situation and what was that space to great to conquer? Were the two hearts just crossing the street or sitting in an airplane for a couple of hours? Why can’t they ever meet again? Yes they will remember each other forever more is what you are implying. Why? Nice start.