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Humor/Satire / Some light-hearted fun.
“This does not qualify.”
“Your credits have not been taken away.”
“Your credits have been taken away.”
I see that everywhere
One has the chance to be humbled and educated.
Personally, I welcome all reviews.
Being nobody.
Even one that only says “done”
That I can make neither head nor tail of
The first part of which seems to have come Somewhere else in a comment.
But I see that all are not so catholic
In their taste or views.
Poets are not always critics
And do know how to appreciate.
I never published
Because I was not savvy enough.
Did not know the (poetic) world’s ways.
Now I’m surprised to see
That even when money’s virtual
Sum1 has to be crucified
To someone else’s demands and expectations
While others are allowed to have theirs!
Well, all that’s not entirely true.
I’ll say this for Steve’s Sister
Who is hopefuly not a bot
That she only sends me these mails because some of my fellow poets don’t like my “lazy” reveiws.
This is not very good poetry, I know.
And this site is great but I’m a grinch-like grouch at times.
But this was fun to write, anyway
And I hope it’s as much fun for y’all to read.
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shannygoat reviewed Version 5 -
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You know, that too is one of my complaints about this site. I understand it’s a necessary evil so we’re not racked with those, “Great, please post more soon.” comments. But really? When did we get so uptight about what kinds of reviews we recieve? Some people get us, some don’t. Some just want to complain about something. Some people, just want their credits back because they’re selfish.
You know, virtual or not, when people see a possitive number associated with their name, they get a sense of power and possessivenss. It’s human nature. Even on a website of this nature.
All in all, I enjoyed your Satire. I though it was very poetic, who cares what those other reviewers think. Keep doing the thing the way you like to. And don’t worry, I won’t try to take your credits away!
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snarfus reviewed Version 5 -
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This brought a smile to my face. Two things come to my attention, however. First, it’s very obvious what this poem is about. Now, unless you don’t mind the possibility of angering the masses (and it’s quite possible that was your intent to begin with), I’d suggest vagueing it up a bit with some symbolism and metaphor.
Second, I’m not crazy about the “all are not so catholic” line. I sort of get what your meaning here is, but it took me two or three reads to get it. I’d suggest changing “catholic” to another word that’s not quite so obtuse.
Elron reviewed Version 5 -
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I enjoyed reading this piece. I am frustrated with the new standards of how critiques are graded and empathize with what you’ve written.
pinestategal reviewed Version 5 -
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In my opinion there is nothing to be gained from writing anything “except maybe text books” unless you are writing because you love to write and have fun doing so. I personally don’t mind a “lazy review” as long as it isn’t glaringly obvious that the reviewer hasn’t even bothered to read the poem.
Panda_Priest reviewed Version 5 -
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I liked your submission.
It definitely has a easily recognisable tongue-in-cheek style. I like the way you incorporated your ideas into the work.
“Did not know the (poetic) world’s ways.” and, “That even when money’s virtual
Sum1 has to be crucified” are very interesting examples of ideas that appealed to me.
I would have given you higher rating were it not for the fact that this is very much a niche market poem. No one outside Urbis would, obviously, understand.
Really nice, light-hearted effort :)
kjoey35 reviewed Version 5 -
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This did make me happy.
In denial of our sparse abilities
we attack our critics’ sensibilities
:)
joshysbutterfly reviewed Version 3 -
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I understand what you mean with this place. I love how people will ask me for a refund because I was overly critical. What the hell does that mean anyway? I am at least truthful. I had a person complain because my critique was to short for her “quote”. What did she expect, an essay? Her spelling was fine and her grammar was fine for the one sentence she put down. And why is there so many people whom I have never even heard of wanting to improve a “personal saying” anyway. Sorry to rant, but I completely identified with you.
Sharon reviewed Version 3 -
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Not the most humorous thing I’ve read, but it puts across a good point. People post their stuff up and expect everyone else to love it. If it’s not loved, it’s not acceptable sometimes. That’s why I appreciate people who (if they don’t like what I write) are specific in what they don’t like. Bland stuff like, “It’s great, it should be published, I can’t wait to read more…” It’s all crap.
Anyway, I hope Steve’s Sister is not a bot too. Course, our virtual tea we had the other day makes me suspect…
This isn’t really a poem that you’ve written. Just because it’s in fragmented sentences doesn’t qualify it as poetic. I think it’s merely a rant, not in block-style. A good rant, of course. Good luck with your not getting rejected.
raynola reviewed Version 3 -
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I am not a poet nor a poetry reviewer, but as satire/venting, this pretty much sums up my first day as a penniless serf in the confusing world of Urbis. You’ve summed up the plight of the have-nots pretty well.
So who do I have to blow around here to get my story seen by somebody, after all the stories I’ve read and reviewed or read and skipped because of their awfulness or reviews rejected because I accidentally clicked the wrong way and saw the existing reviews of the story before I had clicked “Save” on my own review?
Would be almost easier to just start cranking out cover letters and submitting my shite to literary journals already. At least I understand the rules and criteria that way, and it’s not pay-to-play, other than postage.
AnnelyseRobin reviewed Version 3 -
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Ummm, I’m not sure why you used “Sum1” instead of “someone”. In fact, I’m not really sure why this is a poem. Maybe just take out the line breaks and put it under “journal/blogging”?
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That even when money’s virtual
Sum1 has to be crucified
To someone else’s demands and expectations
While others are allowed to have theirs!
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This confused me—Urbis has nothing to do with money, that I know of. No one is being “crucified to demands and expectations”—you submit writing here because you want it to be critiqued, perhaps harshly.
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