It was not meant as a standard song, but a performance piece. I was envisioning a kind of Greek chorus and musical backed narration. Thanks for enjoying it anyway.
Peace,
libramoon
Lyrics / hero
hero
Pearls from the Sun
Diamonds from the Moon
Gold-dusted silks from
exotic worlds
Valued in danger, adventure
from there to here.
Fine old wood
mellowed with wisdom
tasting of Earth essence
silently regales with tales
old and pure.
Young Percival took knighthood seriously. To protect and to serve King and country.
The old King sickening, perhaps dying, soul sickness they said.
Crops failed. Floods and droughts, inopportune times. The peasants too sickened,
died, lived in dreadful poverty and despair.
In a dream, the young knight was shown the Grail—shiny jewels upon a golden cup
self-generating elixir of immortality.
On awakening, he took off in the direction of adventure. He left the dying kingdom
to its own devices, in search of a promised land of magical curative power. He was
not thinking of King or country, but of a delicious ecstatic pounding he knew to be
his own heart.
Where do you ride, fair Percival?
Off to find the dreamer’s Grail?
Learn your song and tell your tale.
Become a son of Sky and Earth
and rain
to return with all you gain
some wondrous day.
Break the spell.
Release the kingdom’s pain.
He learned the ways of seers, demons, subtle sorceries and charms. Growing ever
stronger with healthy exercise and happy purpose, he made his way. Trial by
treacherous trial, he ever more closely approaches his prize.
These trials are the key. They test mettle while bestowing grace, confidence,
skill acquisition, glimmerings of wisdom. The prize glitters, shines, glows
brilliantly in the distance to maintain focus, a clear point, fixed star to contemplate
through twisting, turning, misty mythic pathways.
Sometimes the brick is yellow. Some paths are more intuitive, steps in the dark,
brambly forest.
Percival knows what a hero does. A hero perseveres. A hero scales the tower to free
the enchanted maiden, goes where others dare not because fear is a solid companion.
Daring, fighting, sometimes dazed, momentarily forgetting his cause, he perseveres.
He need but think to look to see his Grail shining, calling him forward.
Of course, he reaches the Grail, discovers the codes, incantations, disarms dragons,
ensorcels giants, generally blazes through to capture his dream.
Returning triumphant, he fixes the kingdom, drop-kicks the curse, cures the old King
of his soul malady, takes the throne to wisely guide into times of prosperity.
So the story goes.
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ruthybird reviewed Version 1 -
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Undone reviewed Version 1 -
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I think you write well and have great imagination. I feel this piece is more like a short story rather than song. I did enjoy it but for a song I feel it should be shortened. For a story maybe a little added. It could go both ways.
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Tawny reviewed Version 1 -
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I read it twice and it reads soooo smooth. I had to look up some of the words like “brambly.” I think a disney cartoon can be based on this lyric. Nice use of adjectives.
cooljim102055 reviewed Version 1 -
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hi there,
well i liked it, and i think it would make a better story in a book only because of the length,,i don’t think you can sing this in the 3 1/2 minute song they would like. I believe you do have talent in that area but to get some of your work published is very, very hard,,,well it has been for me and the people i have talked to, but this was a well written piece,,keep writing and trying!!!...that’s all i do too!!!!!...:), later, jim
starla77 reviewed Version 1 -
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It’s a very good story, very well written, but I don’t think this can work in a song, unless you’re thinking of a hip-pop song, but in this case I don’t think this is the most appropriate genre for this topic, which must be narrated slowly. There are too many words here; it’s a hybrid between a short story and a poem, there’s not even a refrain.
Anyway, I really like it a lot and hope to read more.
Sweettouch reviewed Version 1 -
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I must say the story in the lyrics are quite satisfying. Why you chose it as lyrics and not poetry I do not know, but I can almost hear the strum strum strum of a mandolin so it works. I am not sure that in the world of music today it would make it. Maybe as part of a movie/musical about sset in the past it would go over.
EM reviewed Version 1 -
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I really like the second verse because it brought a sense of grounded reality to the opening verse/chorus. I was interested on how it might develop as a story with finding the grail. however, I felt it ended too abruptly, and that really there is an epic tale here that could take us on a wondrous ride instead of a quick fix. Aside from that, the words “drop-kick” seems a bit modern for this tale. :)
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