Poetry / My friend the cannibal (Analysis)

I think this poem is very humorous and insightful. When you used the word “role” in the second paragraph it kinda reminded me of a poem from Shakespeare. Great moral also.

“he ate Rick whole …
he’d put Rick into the remains of a curry”
  These two lines are in contrast.  This is a light and fun piece.  I think that there should be more fun poetry, good job.  It made me smile and is deeper than it looks at first glance, which is alway good.  A piece  i could read again and again.

At first I was sober, then I felt funny…then guilty-is it real or not?

Rick didn’t care, he thought Fred was super cool…I would remove “he thought”, read it like that.  Sounds better?

and then he ate Rick whole…then he began to eat Rick whole

But much to his suprise Fred became tragically sick…But to his suprise, remove “much”.  Tragically also doesn’t flow right.  Consider:
But to his suprise, Fred became sick
Wishing he hadn’t eaten so much of Rick!

Untill he realised he’d put Rick into the remains of a curry…until he realized he consumed Rick in the curry

The moral of this story is one that’s too true,...that is true

Don’t eat your friends because it’ll come back on you….they’ll come back to eat you!  (You know the disease that’s making him sick is too eating him)

I hate it when people do to me what I just did to you but try it, see if you like it better…it does make it flow better and please let me see aain when you are done.  This is my favorite type of poetry…lessons and riddles-beautiful!

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June 19, 2008

by wanderingeagle

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I wrote it to laugh. join me in a laugh. haaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa

October 05, 2008

by sadpoet

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It’s great.

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Okay, really cute poem. Roll is the correct spelling. I think “he’d put Rick’s remains in a curry” would have been more clear. Funny! I wont eat my friends.

Lol, great poem.

The moral is true, don’t eat people lol but the grammar isn’t too great as well as the way the poem is structured. Keep it up though!

Very entertaining, I laughed out loud. It’s creative and an easy read. Great job! :)