Thank you very much, lizster. :)
Journal, Diary, & Blogging / Dreams And Nightmares
Dreams
My dreams are fantastic manifestations,
whose very elements are stemmed from reality.
As my conscious mind lies dormant in slumber,
my subconscious mind awakens,
under the protective shelter of darkness.
In my somnolence,
I transform into a masterful artist.
My deepest desires and aspirations,
as well as experiences from my waking life,
are drawn upon to provide my inspiration,
and to afford me,
a veritable palette of ambiguous color.
Upon my minds canvas I apply each succinct hue,
to compose a genuine, yet nebulous,
portrait of myself.
Nightmares
These are my darkest fantasies and fears,
stripped free of any pretense,
and laid bare before me;
yet remaining nearly indecipherable.
A tangled skein,
spun from the discolored and frayed
threads of my subconscious mind.
These somber sensations rest,
doubled and redoubled,
layer upon layer,
in a sort of fabric labyrinth;
that, if successfully navigated,
may find me staring directly
into the face of insanity.
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chicago reviewed Version 2 -
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Love this! It really expresses what dreams and nightmares are all about! Bravo!
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lizster0023 reviewed Version 2 -
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This is incredible. I really love it, especially all of the colorful vocabulary and imagry it brings to mind. I really think this is a quality peice of work, and I would love to see some more poetic stuff like this out there!
Felorah reviewed Version 2 -
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I think I stopped breathing when I read the last few lines.
Bravo, bravo, molto bene.
Just… breathtaking.
Zinkyre reviewed Version 2 -
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This sums up everything. The Master Equation for All Life Processes was just answered with this. Bravo.
cloudyknight reviewed Version 2 -
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I’m not one to read much poetry, but THIS is wonderful! I love the way you compare the conscious and the subconscious. Well done!
Allison64Lee reviewed Version 2 -
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I can’t even tell you how much of a good poem this is! I totally understood it all. The metiphores and word chices were great. Two thumbs up for you!
oknapp reviewed Version 2 -
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How wonderful and intelligent. Why couldn’t i have thought of it. You explain the differences in nightmares and dreams. There is good wordplay and lots of great adjectives. I believe in them wholeheartidly. a poem without good strong adjectives is like a morning without a sunrise. I see so many works without defining words. I don’t like stark poetry. I like words that reach out and grab at you. Yours does. I enjoyed this very much Sandi
SANINATHEWRITER reviewed Version 2 -
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This hit me hard, maybe thats why i chose this piece to read. its very deep and very true.i have sometimes found myself lost after a certain dream or nightmare. things we dream about are sometimes stemmed from our subconscious. But anyway before i go all off, this was very good. kudos
Perfect_Shadow15 reviewed Version 2 -
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This is really powerful. I really enjoy it and can see how..opposite they are. I love it. Keep writting.
Carina reviewed Version 2 -
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I love this. I think you did a masterful job with the language as well as the ideas. I don’t think I can suggest any changes…I think the final word “insanity” ends it with such strength and does not disappoint. It doesn’t read like a journal or blogging generally would but I suppose anything is possible and if words come out of you like that, you are lucky. It feels “crafted” enough to fit in another category, poetry, perhaps if you believe strongly in poetic license, as I do. Great work.
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