Poetry / dreaming without the key

Writing with dyslexia
Dancing with no feet
Singing out of breath
Acting with no self esteem

From one hopeless case to the next
You still leave me out of breath
I guess you just can’t fight it;
Dreaming without the key

No matter how hard people try
Sometimes the only way out is to fail
Bail while you can
If you can handle taking the wood from the nail

My mind says give up; my heart says exactly the same
Somehow no matter how hard I fight
I just can’t take the pain
I guess that just what it’s like; dreaming without the key

Trying so hard to give up
Trying to loosen the nail
Tighter and tighter it goes
This bond won’t logically sail

I guess that’s what its like
Dreaming with the key
But my final question is this
Is it love? Or am I just going insane?

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June 30, 2008

rickmillen

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rickmillen reviewed Version 1 - Read 100% of the Item

Nice poem. In the forth stanza, ‘that’ should be ‘that’s’. The transition from “dreaming without the key” to “dreaming with the key” is somewhat confusing. What is the key? The conclusion of this piece clarifies things a bit, but leaves the reader wondering, what is the key?

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