Poetry / Cracked (Analysis)

I’m the only one who can see,
There’s a crack in reality,
That really doesn’t seem to be,
This unknown curiosity,
Increasing in intensity,
Rips me away from being free,
What the hell does it want from me,
Except to instill anarchy,
It really doesn’t seem scary,
But that could be a trickery,
So I look inside instantly,
And something I did not foresee,
This object of simplicity,
Could turn out to be so deadly,
Now I know most assuredly,
Paradox reacts constantly,
For fate treated me wickedly,
And seemed to curse me horribly,
For now I’m the one who can see,
There’s a crack in reality.

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March 10, 2009

donyavangogh

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October 17, 2008

Speedracer2009

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Speedracer2009 reviewed Version 1 - Read 100% of the Item

It’s got good potential but has too many forced rhymes throughout it. If you were to ever edit it, even though you say you won’t, you should look up better rhymes or not have all the words rhyme together.

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July 15, 2008

sweetchariot

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sweetchariot reviewed Version 1 - Read 100% of the Item

While I love rhyming, I know it isn’t for everyone. I thought this was a really nicely written piece of work, although at times it seemed like you were really reaching for the word to rhyme. On the plus side, I LOVE how you begin and end this poem the same way. GREAT!

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July 07, 2008

heartsrwild

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33	F	Gaston, SC	May 09

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I liked this piece, for u are not alone in the sense of a broken reality. I thought it was a very tackful way of saying lifes not perfect nor is it fair.
Yet were here.