Lyrics / Breathe

[verse 1]
When you seem like you’re dead
Helplessly in your bed
And no one cares
Your life’s a nightmare

When you’re down and you’re mad
Or pissed off at your dad
Just come to me because
I know exactly what you need

[chorus]
Breathe
When your world is gone
And your time is running out
Breathe
When you’ve been conned
And you keep crying out
Just come to me and I’ll show you how
Breathe

[verse 2]
When you’re low and you’re sad
And everything’s bad
Just keep going straight ahead
And dont ever look back

When you know that the world
Has stopped its own whirl
And you’re crying out now
Come to me and I’ll show you how

[chorus]
[solo]

[chorus 2]
Breathe
When there’s no one left
And you’re crying out for help
Breathe
When the world is gone
And you begin to melt
Breathe

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July 26, 2008

Roehl56

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Roehl56 reviewed Version 1 - Read 100% of the Item

dude for reall start a new band cuz your music is GREAT really its good u need to become a artist BRO

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July 24, 2008

cooljim102055

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cooljim102055 reviewed Version 1 - Read 100% of the Item

hi there,
cause the story itself is good,,yapped enough, hope i helped…)..jim

i like the song structure and the craft you used in the songwriting process of this lyric, i think what you need to do is rhme the 3,4, lines also in each verse to have it consistent throughout, like the music will be in those cases..i think i would keep the basic idea, but the title “breathe” is very good but used so many times before, maybe you can change it to a similiar title