The Item you were looking for is marked as mature. If you are 18 or older please login to view it.
Young Adult / I never thought...
I never thought he would touch me the way he did. He was my first and what I thought to be my only. I never thought that when he told me I was beautiful that he was just trying to get some. Naive me again. I felt so special with him, me in his arms naked. Sneaking him into the house while my parents slept right down the hall was sneaky, absolutely stupid to say the least.
I risked so much for him. He never really cared about me. Just a quick fuck when he needed it.
I always thought he loved me but then things changed. He would always make me have sex with him. Even when I didn’t want to he would make me. It could technically be construed as rape…. well even more than it already was. He was 18 and I was 14. After that i started to see what he was really after. Just someone innocent who didn’t know better to spread her legs open to him. I guess that was me.
His sister, my best friend warned me about this. I didn’t listen and we wound up not talking for 9 months because of this.
I tried breaking up with him on numerous occasions. He always sent me on some sort of guilt trip and made me stay with him.
Finally i grew the balls to do it and this time it was final.
I could get on to living my life.
And that;s exactly what I did.
Still to this day, almost a year later, he tries to get It from me.
I never thought I could be so strong as to say NO to him.
I never thought.
You need to log in to urbis or create an urbis account to review this writing.
Reviews
Sort Reviews by Newest | Oldest | Highest Quality | Lowest Quality | Newest Comments |
This 62 word review has not been unlocked.
This 108 word review has not been unlocked.
This 106 word review has not been unlocked.
I don’t know what this is. So it makes it hard to write a critique about it.
Umm, as far as story telling goes it shows potential. The beginning could be altered to make it seem more intriguing. “I never thought he would touch me the way he did.” I’d scrap that bit completely. And I would alter this “He was my first and what I thought to be my only.” And begin it with some kind of metaphor or similie or something about first love and how its supposed to be wonderful and special and all those kinds of cliche things. I’d then drop the bombshell [painfully obvious, but still a bombshell to say the least] about how he only wanted you for sex.
How you ended it made it sound like something from a poem. Which, if structured well enough, could work.
- add/view comments (0)
Showing 1 - 4 of 4
Review item
Add to faves
GENERAL
REVIEW QUEUE
Ratings & Rankings
