Short Story / Suprise!

Made me smile. I can imagine being rather freaked out by such an occurence!

The first 3 words are nice and crisp…it’s like a mini Haiku!

Interesting. I mean, you could make this work… as a childrens’ book. But this little poem doesn’t really do it for me.

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July 26, 2008

by anaisnais

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This is a six word memoir as requested for contest, thanks on stopping by to comment all.

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This was cute. You can imagine it is Easter and these are the sounds you hear on Easter

the runs image is nice

I found it cute. However, I would change the word “push” to ….. pop.

that’s what happens when you try to eat raw eggs. lol

Very cute and playful. In six words you’ve given us non-stop action.  very imaginative and very well done.  

I think you unfairly added to your submission by describing it more fully in your notes. But a good visual, none the less.

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July 18, 2008

by anaisnais

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No actually, if you look at my other sites used – I condensed a Haiku I’d written but mistyped the first time and submitted without checking through….a lesson for us all perhaps to slow down a little?  Thanks for stopping by!

July 18, 2008

by anaisnais

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Oh yes, I forgot to say that the original was not accepted because of the omission – so was unseen anyway, hope that clarifies! lol.

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I kinda like the Batmanesque onomatopoeia you have going on here. Again, not sure of the relevance, particularly when you get to the word “runs.”

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July 18, 2008

by anaisnais

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Thankyou for your review/stopping by and time to comment. With the word runs I was thinking of a play on words…thinking of a nice boiled egg with runny yolk for breakfast but finding an escaping chick running away?

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